 Kimimmari Myou Uchiha 2009-11-16 . chapter 13Woot Woot! ^_^ Hooray for chapter 13!! :D :D
Well... so Neji considers Tenten a friend now, ne? :D Well... I can sense the hidden meaning beneath that... heehee xD xD xD
Honestly, I ADORE THIS STORY!!
I must say, your stories never EVER disappoint me! I always find myself utterly engrossed in every last one of them! :D :D
I think you may be my new favorite author on Fanfiction...!! :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
:D :D :D :D
~KMU~ |
 Kimimmari Myou Uchiha 2009-11-15 . chapter 3HAH!
Man this'll be good xD
Oh, and I loved the Gin reference!! I'm surprised his cheeks don't fall off with that permanent smile plastered to his face!! :D :D
Well, on to chapter 4!! ^_^
xD
~KMU~ |
 oatmeal.cookie.luvr 2009-11-14 . chapter 7I like this a lot. However, I think there is a small mistake on the fifth-to-last sentence, where Tenten states "I remain here in Japan." Did you mean China? |
 Cryptic-Queen 2009-11-08 . chapter 13Hi!
I really like your storie. This is unique for me because I have never read something like this (on FF). I really enjoy how you are blending in real historical facts with the storie. By the way, thanks for having all those footnotes :D
I can't wait for you to update! (^.^)
*C-Q |
 Ulqyfangirl27 2009-11-06 . chapter 1 For starters, ulqyfangirl27 IS my real penname. I'm just too lazy to log in XD Dont worry, though, I added you to my computer favs =) So, I LOVE your story so far, my favorite stories are the ones with slowly developing relationships, especially the ones that go from hate to love! I can't wait till you upload the next chapter, I'll know cause I check the NejiTen archives just about every day. Anyway, big fan of yours.
~Ulqyfan |
 beckylovesgigs 2009-11-06 . chapter 13yeah! you're not dead!
loving Jiraiya in this chapter, he's such a firt |
 Taniya 2009-11-05 . chapter 13 Oh my gosh, its been so long, when i first read this i knew i had to read it to the very end then... re-read.
Please update soon, (very soon) i cant wait! |
 TwilightRaver 2009-11-05 . chapter 13Ah!
It's been awhile! But welcome back, hun! lol.
I seriously love Neji and Tenten. Neji is quite a sweetie...If only, if only. =P
Now for me to go rescue my dying fanfics. lol.
-TR |
 SnowCharms 2009-11-04 . chapter 13Hinata is starting to feel insufferable to me now. In actuality, Hinata is not supposed to be present at the treaty meetings. She's not there as an ambassador, neither is she an assistant. Update! |
 a thousand cranes 2009-11-04 . chapter 13I like how Neji is sso pursuing Tenten. :) haha usually it's the other way around with Tenten good naturedly pestering him. This is a cute story. ^^ Hopefully you will find a way to incorporate the rest of the naruto cast soon. mainly Sasuke and Naruto?? haah I was wondering if you were going to make on the emperor, but Mutsuhito does seem to be the more reasonable choice now that I think of it. Keep up the good work.
lol I love how you made Hinata such an annoying self righteous **. |
 HeavensPheonix561 2009-11-04 . chapter 13Thanks for updating. i lyked dis chapter. bt 1 question: why is hinata such a B*h. no offense tho. |
 An Act of Seven Ages 2009-08-30 . chapter 11See, I love this chapter! Because it holds so much promise of what's yet to come. You're delaying action, but you've supplied the right about feed for your audience to keep trailing. Does that make any sense? I think I'm babbling. I love the humour thrown in too with Tenten. :P The sarcasm certainly makes it all worthwhile! |
 An Act of Seven Ages 2009-08-30 . chapter 10Very cute, though I find the luck of anything actually happening a bit of a turn-off. A lot of this appears to be internal monologue, back and forth between Tenten and Neji and while it is nice, I'm still not seeing much development in terms of plot or very great detail outisde of 'this is coming and she/he is feeling this way now, due to this'. It gets a bit dull, but I think your dialogue is great. I love the character's interactions verbally, but not so much physically. Other than speaking and moving between places, there's not much going on. There's never very much you describe and I'm guessing this is probably because you've written your story with only a few very vague ideas in mind.
Maybe I shouldn't be so harsh, because I've mentioned your brevity once before, and liked it since it works well when you're feeding us some character details. Neji being 19 for example and wondering about his youth. (I think that was an earlier chapter!) Try not to become disheartened, I am still a fan! |
 An Act of Seven Ages 2009-08-30 . chapter 7You actually brought up some of what I mentioned through the characters - the sexism; why Neji irritates her. I enjoyed it quite a lot and I'm sorry my reviews never hand you anything helpful. I am still reading and hope you don't think you've lost an audience. I will ask though, why Tenten says, "I remain here in Japan." They're in China, right?
And there's something outside the time period you're writing for that you might like to read: 'Wild Swans' by Jung Chang. You've probably heard of it, it's a popular book. Pretty interesting, too. There's mention of a few Chinese traditions that you might like to look up. Like foot binding, concubines and their perceived inferiority and the very lavish traditional weddings. Women were carried through the streets to their husbands in a sedan chair. If the woman were to walk it would basically be a sign he barely loved her. I don't know how relevant that is, but just some things to consider! I mean it seems to me that women in this China basically lived to prepare for their wedding day. And it was never about falling in love! Tenten would never tolerate that. :P |
 SnowCharms 2009-08-07 . chapter 12Tell me, did you really do your research well? Because there's no way that the Sakura blossom can last for 3 full seasons till winter. Most of them don't even last till the beginning of spring, unless they're winter sakura. Tenten's reaction is too much, is there a reason for it? Update! |