Hm. On one point I am screaming "KILL TEH MARY-SUE!"

But your style's not that bad. So whatever.

ohh! I love it! you leave it quite open, so you could continue if you wanted to, and that'd be good! lol, but it's up to you...

I think it'd be more fun killing you, parisinmyeyes.

Great again, Akira, though you've really improved since then.

Awful Mary Sue. Terrible. Identical twins are supposed to be of the same gender, and are supposed to look exactly alike. A girl and a boy would be fraternal.
Please, kill the Mary Sue.

Identical twins are actual supposed to LOOK ALIKE, you know.

Identical twins are supposed to look alike and be of the same gender. Hence the term "Identical." Maybe you want to adress this in a later chapter? It would serve as a interesting plot device.
Also, flowery words do not equal good writing. Remember KISS- Keep It Simple Stupid. The overly long sentences just translate to blah blah blah blah blah blah blah. A lot of your commas could be replaced with periods, which would make the story a lot more comprehensible. Flowery words are good every once in a while. They ad spice to the story, but DON'T OVERUSE THEM! Azure is NOT the only word to describe blue. It's not a crime to say blue. You could have used blue, sapphire, cobalt, "Eyes the color of the sky." Don't just use the first word that comes out of the thesaurus over and over. This will ad variety to the descriptions which help draw the readers in.
And the word I thing your groping for at the end and in your summary is "Confrontation" Not "Confirmation." (or any of the ways you spelled it) I don't think Lucius is ordained in the Catholic church.

interesting character. i like.

oh lala whats gonna happen to her next ... DUN DUN DUN i love it so far write more i'm going through with drawl i'm a bit hyper right now! CAN YA TELL? didnt think so

but any waysd i really like it and something good better happen soon cuz its sad and sad storys are so ... well sad :'( they make me cry I NEED MORE! ... NOW ... pretty please ?

hey, finish it or i'll sue you, its that good! i love it! yea! dracona, my new favorite fanfic character(hey, i'm not joking either, she is my new favorite fanfic character)!

i like it a lot!keep writing!

Yorah! I love love Malfoy story's accept I like a nice kind Malfoy well not to kind!

but great story I loved it so far!

Actually not bad, I think this story has a lot of potential. It just needs a little brushing up, a few corrections, and it will be perfect. First, Lucius, he would be able to get out of the suit. He did manage to worm his way out of the whole "threatening the magical council into submission" thing in the second book. Maybe you should have Dracona use a legal means of getting out from under his thumb. She could have herself declared an adult if she gets a good lawyer. I was also hoping you'd set her and Snape up, though I'm not sure if that is the direction you are going in. Wishing you the best of luck with your story,

Your Worshipfulness

Good beginning , keep going . And your spelling isn't that bad .

Your story has good potential, and you presented it well. I like the new character, but watchout for spelling and using the correct words in sentences. I think you should write some more!

is she evil?