 Abandonment Personified 2009-09-12 . chapter 1The "one nation under Prowl" bit did make me chuckle, actually.
Ok, I'm not the best at writing reviews, but let me try...
First off, I think it needs a little backstory. Why does Prowl want to go after Bluestreak so much?
And I think Bluestreak was a little... I don't know, unresponsive? I might not be reading closely enough, but it felt kind of one-sided, like Blue didn't really know that Prowl was doing anything to him. |