I wasn't expecting it to be Jordan!

I really like the way you mirrored the relatinships with each other. Showing the differences.

Can't wait for more.

beautiful. the compare and contrast was an awesome idea.

I really like the way you kept this anonymous until the end, though it was a bit confusing for a moment there. All in all, however, this was a really interesting read. I like how the relationship between JD and Perry and the affair between JD and Jordan are polar opposites - one rough while the other's tender. It's a really interesting dynamic.

This is a great start. Looking forward to seeing what you write next.

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Aha, this was so good. Except the singular 'they' was incredibly distracting. I can see why you did it, but it's still a little annoying.
:D
-- Joanna