that was great you should make a sequel

Sexy o.o

This was a really nice one.

OMG YESS YESS

I WANT U TO CONTINUE WITH THIS STORY

CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUUEEEEEEEEEEE PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

I WANT TO READ MORE OF SAKURA AND DEIDAR'A ROMANTIC ENCOUNTER

AND RELATIONSHIP TOO

SO PLZZZZZZZZZZ CONTINUE AND MAKE MORE CHAPTERS D

Continue!

CONTINUE DAMMIT! I mean, please. 3

OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD! You're a really good writer, you know that? :)

I REALLY hope you can continue _ so please do write more!

I love it, hun! I'd like to see it turned into a multi-chapter story.

Love,

Vala

Please. Continue. It's for your own good, you know. My plot bunny minions will eat you in your sleep if you don't. Deisaku is one of my favorite pairings.

Nice fan fic! you should totally keep on going :D

Holly shit you gotta keep on going with this stoey its so adorable and i think your a really good wrighter :)

This is awesome, please continue :D

This chapter wasn't quite as good as the previous one... You forgot to make a new paragraph when a new person starts to talk. It makes it very confusing and difficult to read, so I hope you can sort it out in future chapters!

Your description, on the other hand, was wonderful! You have a real talent for making a story flow, and your use of adjectives is extremely advanced.

Good work! Just sort out those paragraphs!

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*Sque!* That was really hot... And cute...

It was very nice to read. I like how you write it very much from Sakura's point of view, but still in second person. It's a hard style to write, but your readers will love you for it!

My favourite line was "But she was pretty sure it was a chick." It really cracked me up.

The kiss was REALLY smexy. I liked how forceful yet gentle you make him kiss... I can't wait to read the rest! -

x x x

so cute! i can't wait for the next chapter. really good job.