Hi, I gather English isn't you're 1st language, as some of the sentances don't make sence. It's 'the English' not 'the Englands'. Maybe you should try getting an english-speaking beta - it might help improve you're english.

Although, I have to admit that I wouldn't be able to write a story in a different language, so well done for trying. This review is meant to be constructive, but sorry if it isn't.

Also, i should tell you that lots of people in England would object to England becoming an American state. Stongly object. We like being our own country.

PLEAZE TO BE MAKING OF MY BABYS YOU ARE HAVING OF BEAUTIFUL WRITING.

This made even less sense than your story about America "Danubing" Japan to the moon.

That was good... more, please!! And have you visited this website yet: http://w.alloallofans. ? It's a message board, where you can talk to other Allo Allo fans, and read fanfiction :).

Are Germans writing in the 'Allo Allo' section now?!