What a wonderful story! I think you did a wonderful job of capturing Kaylee and Simon's relationship, and the premise and plot were very unqiue. Hope to see more from you in the Firefly genre!

Wow. I absolutely love how you wrote River in this story. Her language was metaphoric, funny, poetic, prophetic -- exactly like it was in the show. And that's very hard to do. Absolutely brilliant writing. :o)

I finally finished reading this maybe a week ago. I really liked the way you handled Simon in this...his ignorances, his worry, his doctor-y-ness not being enough, even his pride as it all goes down the tubes and, seemingly, nothing he can do helps. I don't know if you really intended this to be a character study, but in a way it is.

This was a really good story. The characters felt in-character and you wrote the emotional tension very well.

Jayne with the note was Hilarious! And I loved Simons "I'm a doctor not an immunologist" line. Very Dr. McCoy from Star Trek.

This is SO GOOD!

Thanks! I enjoyed this. Good writing and good characters and a good plot.

I apologize for the length of time it has taken me to get here, computer troubles account for the bulk of the delay. But the story, as I've been saying all along, was wonderful. I especially liked your use of the crio container as a solution because I've never seen anyone use it as a component to a story, even though it is probably still there as you say so it was something new made from something that was there from the same but you're the only one clever enough to see it. I liked the expression "Riverless space" as used in the scene where River isn't in the shuttle. I liked the scene where Simon sings to River, he's so patient and sweet he's like a dreamboat, as they would say in the 50s. :) I liked your backwards flashback/rememberance sequence while Simon is remembering everything about Kaylee, that was well done and the Jayne apology scene was funny. I didn't feel very good about Simon talking to Kaylee about how when River danced before they were kidnapped she looked "good and whole again", I worry that that sort of talk will make River feel like she is no longer good, like she is wrong or bad in some way, she has enough fears about that as it is. But given the world Simon comes from we can't expect him to think of those types of little things now can we. I had so much reading this story and I even didn't mind the epilogue despite its foray into post bdmness, you still did good and I would hartily recommend this story to anyone who wants something written well, interesting and true to the way things should be written. Well done and you are quite clever and enjoyable to read.
Riona

Amazing story. One of my favorite Firefly fanfics of all time. A must read for every Kaylee and Simon fan.

Good tie in with a post Miranda verse and a very sweet conclusion for this pairing of Kaylee and Simon, which I usually don’t have much interest (IMHO, they lack romantic sparks to be engaging) and I always thought their hook up in the BDM was a bone for fans because Joss couldn't resolve Mal and Inara in the first movie of a trilogy), but you've done a great job of creating the back ground of a love story that was lacking from their storyline necessary for viewers to buy into their future together:)

Nice job, looking forward to more of your work.

I've been enjoying this story immensely! This is the first story in a really long time that I've enjoyed so much that I've gone looking for the updates. Well done.

This is a great story, well written (and I don't toss that out lightly) with perfect character voice.

You do an *excellent* job on Zoe & River, the two characters most authors appears to truly struggle with. Thank God you avoid the River talking about herself in 3rd person all the time. She's cryptic, but not entirely. You've made her perfectly understandable if only the other characters would twist their perceptions just a tad, and if Simon would stop expecting her to be who she used to be but will never be again.

Love the Mal/Inara interaction in this chapter -- both the shocking moment of complete honesty between them and how it stunned both of them into silence and perhaps insight, thankfully (and I imagine not coincidentally) interrupted by River before they could say something to screw it up.

Great narrative! This is good work!

Excellent characterization, and at times funny, alarming, and sad. I like how you're building up tension and complications with Kaylee's condition, and I also really liked your explanation for why she's so much worse. Socio-political commentary, and a nice piece of Simon and Kaylee character development.

Fabulous chapter, I adore this story, so well written and intriguing and keeps me glued to it waiting to see what happens next. You write all the charactors so well, I know I've said it each time but I think is very important to keep pointing out how good it is. The scenes between Simon and Kaylee are so cute/sad because she is hurting and he loves her so much. You write them so well together. Your hollucination scene was quite frightening and effective, really scary and done very well. I loved your "purred like a kitten after a tuna dinner" comment, really cute! I also liked the time you spent on Zoe, you are so good at touching base with all the charactors. I think someone needs to talk to River about how she isn't a burden or troublesome, she seems to worry about how she takes Simon's time and if I were her caregiver I'd do my best to express that I appreciate her very much to at least try and ease that feeling of burdensomeness she seems to have. And I admit I was an idiot in the last review, especially since my little brother has been sick all week with a bad cold that includes a fever, you were right, I was wrong. Incidentally I made a similar mistake to Simon: Iassumed that since it had never happened to me (I've got a very strong immune system) that it wouldn't happen to others. By the way the "variable" you explain at the end is really a good point, very logical and makes perfect sense and also gives Simon a wake up call about inequality. Well done. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Riona