Wow, just wow. This is completely not want I expected when I started to read this story. I was very compelled by Henry to believe him in the beginning and that he didn't kill Hawkeye. You are lured into a false sense of security, but slowly it changes and you start second-guessing yourself. It was very clear to see how he made the connection between his father and Mustang, with only a few clues to make his assumptions. You wrote the characters very well too, not once did I think they were OOC.
I also think it was really good that we had no comments from Mustang after Hawkeye dies, very well written. A++!

Really a facinating story, great psychology and great idea! I'm pretty sure I get why he did it, but it was cryptic enough that it's still open for debate. :D

Willing submission and forced submission are two entirely different things, but they can look alike if the people in question are good at hiding their emotions. Though I think the only way that he could mistake their relationship as abusive was because he didn't know them well. I've seen the willing submission mistaken as abuse in the Sasuke/Sakura fandom, but that's people actually writing (OOC!) abuse and claiming it as cannon.

The murder must have come so much out of the blue, especailly for Mustang. Hawkeye saves some guy's life, the guy sends her flowers, then shows up randomly and shoots her. T.T Poor, poor Mustang. Sounds like he just got up the courage to pop The Question, too.

Just one question: Did the dinner and coffee shop incidents actually happen, or did his mind create them? I'm inclined to beleive that they didn't (especially since I can't see Hawkeye agreeing to go to dinner with a complete stranger) but you wrote it so that it could be taken either way.

You also did a brilliant job of Riza's character, showing how she was loyal to Mustang, professional with her subordinates, but yet very human when out of uniform. Ah, the Riza love! :D

I love how when alone, she's always staring off into the distance. Henry interprets it as fear, since she's obviously thinking about Mustang, but it's probably ranging from stuff as serious as "The corruption in the government... can we really win?" to stuff as trivial as "Roy's probably eaten dinner by now. I hope he remembered to turn off his stove. He's so forgetful sometimes. And how bad will it look if the "Flame Alchemist" sets his own apartment on fire?"

Speaking of which, I hope it wasn't Havoc that started the fire... XD "Some lout" is kinda mean!

I also loved how Havoc and Falman gave descriptions that kinds of made two halves of a whole. Falman may have mentioned things like her fondness for tea, or the way her expression shifted subtly when she looked at Mustang, while Havoc would mention things like her wry sense of humor and her outlook on life. By the way, your mention of how Havoc is a person who understands her makes me smile. Mustang may know her better and be able to predict her, but Havoc would be more familiar with her actual though process, I think. Those two are alike, in some ways.

Also, the mental image of Ishbal Hawkeye choking on cigarette smoke is adorable, for some reason. She might not be inclined to try smoking since it messes with your lungs, but peer pressure does wonders! XD

I'd love for you to write the scene where Havoc talks to the psychologist, as a one-shot. *hinthinthint* It would really show a lot of her character, and I'd like to see how Havoc would react if she died. I've never been good at him. XD

Aha, I love the Havoc-Hawkeye friendship, and the way you're telling the story is very interesting. I especially liked the stories behind smoking, and the love life discussion. She totally nails Havoc when he starts alluding things. XD

Also, it's realistic how you have this guy fall but her... but it's not as much who she really is.

Methinks that he killed Mustang out of jealously and she killed herself. I'll just have to see.

Haha, I jsut got around to reading this. Awesome so far, especially Hawkeye's reaction to the flowers. A lot of people use flower meanings, but Falman? That was just epic. XD

It must be terribly difficult to remain impartial when dealing with people like Henry. I liked how you expressed the Psychologist's struggle with that.

Ah, ha! So now I understand the importance of the background information of Henry's childhood. Interesting overlap of characters, imprinting all the painful memories onto Riza. A chance to go back and erase and prevent all that heartache. Pretty desperate, bleak, and hopeless though...

It makes good sense that Henry killed himself, given the fact that was his plan beforehand, and being without Riza would only make life seem all the more pointless too, I'd think.

I liked how the Psychologist's experiences with Henry effected his relationship with his own son, in making him strive to encourage as well as discipline. Well the ending isn't happy for many of the characters, it does appear to have a positive impact on the Psychologist and his family.

All in all an intriguing tale - tragic, sad, and a touch disturbing, but an enjoyable read. I've always liked characters who experience their own warped version of reality, driving them to do insane things, like some of Poe's work. This fit nicely in that category. Good job and thanks for sharing!

"His hand clutched at the buttons of his coat tightly, anxiously. “Is- Is this what you really want?” he asked, stepping a little too close for Hawkeye’s comfort."
Both nervous and yet familiar (at least familiar from his viewpoint).

"It seemed as though he was both giving much and very little thought to his words."
Nice. He is likely agonizing over the words, but not thinking about how they sound to someone else. Of course, he probably assumes that Riza understands the background and situation too.

"The knowledge that she had someone there to back her up if anything were to go wrong was comforting, but she simultaneously found herself annoyed by that thought. She was a military woman; she could take care of her own problems without men stepping in."
Neat little mental conflict here.

Like Gris mentioned, I was originally a little unclear on who was who after the PoV shifted from Riza to Henry, though I did figure it out fairly easily.

"Even as the man holding him called for help, tears fell down over two pairs of cheeks, and Henry found himself totally trapped by the people he had never really trusted. And yet she was dead, and gone, but he was still there, now even more alone than he had ever felt before."
Man, that is sad. Both for Mustang and Henry. The irreversible horror, the sinking feeling just after an event that can't be undone...

Oh, coming to the revelation! I liked how the Psychologist peeked in at Henry rehearsing somewhat madly.

"After he’d proved less volatile than expected, security had been lightened..."
Yes, it certainly seems like Henry is a fairly mild-mannered fellow. I'm curious to discover how this guy actually went so far as to kill the light of his life!

"But then, if Henry didn’t do it that meant her real killer was still unapprehended, and he was made to look very guilty."
I wasn't clear on who was made to look very guilty here - the unapprehended real killer?

“-Thinking of the day Riza died. It seems so surreal, now. I-is she dead?”
I looked at him levelly. “Do you think you’d be here if she were alive?”
Not to be argumentative, but if Henry had attacked but not actually killed Riza, he may well have been committed to the facility anyway. Just my perspective.

"Henry had hoped that these alchemists would have their license removed..."
Licenses, maybe?

"...and be told to find work elsewhere, but it seemed that they could be found jobs just as any normal soldier could be."
The last part here is a bit muddled, though I get the idea.

"he spotted a heart-wrenching gleam upon one finger"
I liked that.

This chapter took a bit to get to Henry and Riza, but with the background laid it was good to see Henry's view of Mustang and Hawkeye on duty.

"It was mentioned in passing, with a mouthful of baked beans, somewhere between the carrots and the fruit..."
Beautiful!

"She contented herself instead with getting the job at hand completed to the best of her ability."
That sounds very Riza-ish - duty first.

Like you said, some information in there from another perspective, but presented in a round-about manner. Nicely done. Well I'd have liked to hear more from Riza on the matter, I didn't expect much elaboration from her.

Some pretty heavy and serious stuff there. I feel sorry for Henry now...

Again, I enjoyed the little details of how and where Henry looks as he is thinking and speaking, and how the Psychologist tries to read Henry's body language.

"For a while he was silent. I was thinking about my next question to prod him into talking if he didn’t start again for some time, but ultimately it was the silence that drew him back into conversation."
I liked this, the silence drawing him out.

Boy, Henry and Riza have much more of a relationship going than I'd expected! I'm still taking it with a grain of salt, as Henry likely reads more into it than is actually there, but still... I see Henry is capable of self-analysis and looking critically at his own perceptions. Of course it is impossible to be totally objective, and he is obviously more than a little infatuated.

I enjoyed the further look at Henry's childhood and family, and how he applied some of those bad memories to Riza.

"I had tried talking to him about several other things in meetings after the one he told me about the flowers."
Should it instead be "...after the one during/in which he told..."?

I like the psychologist's attempt to gauge Henry's perceptiveness and the psychologist's work on presenting an image to which Henry will be respond favourably. I guess that is what psychologists do, but those sort of mind games are neat.

"Everything about him from his nervous stance to the way he clutched at his clipboard as though it was a floatation device and he was in the middle of the sea during a storm..."
I loved that description!!

Falman's explanation of the flower meanings was humourous but also helpful in understanding Henry's intentions.

Whoa, so Henry had a serious case of "creepy stalker" going on. Definitely something had rattled loose in the attic.

I think you did a good job showing Henry's unbalanced mental state as he goes from memory to memory and consequently jumps from emotion to emotion.

I like Henry's tendencies to rub his face, or lean on his hands.

Now we've gotten to know Henry's background a little. He sounds like he grew up sheltered from the outside but somewhat oppressed by his family, and now is just beginning to make something for himself on his own two legs.

Ah, photographers really are fearless... I liked the quick rescue - I can see that would make a profound impression.