Aw! I LOVED the parts about Lu and Ed, how his views of them had changed to be MUCH BETTER! ^U^ How sweet! I LOVE how their relationships changed during/after his transformation! *U*

Goodness, this was really good! I LOVED the parts about Caspian, too, as well as Aslan! Also, the parts where she discounts/slanders the beliefs and ways of his parents (I STILL find it hilarious that he calls them by their first names...) were amazing! ^U^

Rock on! ^U^ *U*
Ever-so sincerely signed,
Shizuku Tsukishima749 :D ;D :) ;)

A great story. Very good.

This is perhaps the best glance I've gotten into Eustace's mind for a long, long time. His thoughts were so in character, for you can see that he's in the middle of changing, but still thinks in some ways as he did as a brat. An interesting phase of his character development that we hardly ever get a glimpse of-and you did a terrific job with it! Well done, indeed!

Lion be with you,

KC

nice! Some of the phasing feels a little off, like the first sentence, compared with the rest of it. Nice short though.

It took me a while to to get be cause of it's size and heavier reading, but I'm glad I did. It was very well written and in character. I loved the bit with Eustace and Lucy and Ed at the end, Great ending.

This line made me laugh. How very twelfth century and utterly outdated, as Alberta would say.

Wow ... I love the narration and the writing style, makes it seem almost like canon; and the feelings you've portrayed ... just mind-blowing.

I ::really:: like this! Eustace-turned-dragon is a favorite of mine. I like how you've expressed his thoughts as he is slowly turning from the old, cranky, sceptical Eustace toward the more open-hearted Eustace. I think the end is lovely. It shows that he does need the affection of his cousins. Good job!

This really is very good. And the train-of-thought is connected and makes sense and is interesting (unlike some stories written in the same form). You've done very well with Eustace here- he's on the verge of being better, but just hasn't quite reached the point at which he's changed. But it's lovely.

can you pwetty please do a short story on EUstace's reaction to the conversation Edmund and EUstace haves when EUstace comes back human

A wonderful insight on Eustaces time as a dragon - my favourite part was his realization that he wants a new heart and a new mind!