It was perfect, really. The characters, the dialogue, the plot, the everything. I especially enjoyed the bit with the kittens and how Mrs. Tibs checked Peter. Also, I'd like to give special praise for the last lines. They were darling and perfect :).

~P.B

This was as excellent as the rest!" x

I liked it very much. The "first-hand" experience of pnemonia from Peter was very well interpreted. It takes a lot to put yourself in anothers shoes, and you did it very well. You should take up acting. 93 out of 100

*flails* How adorable! I especially loved the ending! 5 stars!

Amazing. Another one of yours to go on my faves list. Thanks for sharing!

As Always,
Desi

I liked this a lot! You described convincing and realistically the experience of being sick - I smiled at the long sleepless nights, it's so very true when you are sick. And as always I loved the interaction between the four siblings and the tiny bits that are so important to give consistency to your Narnian universe in itself - the reappearance of the kittens is lovely, they are so cute!- and related to the books - the story Edmund and its mention to king Gale. I also enjoy your use of archaic vocabulary and was happy to see the word 'sennight', which I learnt from your stories and is my favourite.
I am very happy to see a new story from you.

someone really should tell well-meaning people when they're making things worse. (lucy). after all, if they really want to help, wouldn't they rather know?

really good.

I'm completely in love with the world you've built for the Pevensies through your stories - Into the West, Thole... all of them. You're an excellent writer, and your fics are all brilliant. Could you write / have you written a fic about Peter's illnesses in England, that you mentioned? I would LOVE to read one if you did / have. Whatever it is you do write, though, keep posting. It's all awesome, and I can't get enough of it :)

A great story. Very good.

Me likes! Though you are supposed to be working on a different story...

Edmund's disgruntled protest that he does not snore is quite amusing. I really like how you drop odd bits of humor in the story so very quietly.

Ah, the deliverance of the Lone Islands. I shall have to take that bit and finish it out. How then Prince Gale, youngest child and only son of King Gale gained his father's blessing and went in disguise with the knights and slew the dragon that all did fear. That could be fun...

Well done!

Lovely. Hope Edmund didn't get sick after this.

So sweet! They are too cute together. Ta for putting stuff up on the dot net!

Oh, elecktrum, it's so lovely! Not the sickness part, but the family side of it.

Honestly, whenever I read your stories, I wish there were hundreds more to read!

Loved it...
Hope to read more of you!
Luna