Nice story, looking forward to the next addition. I'm no stranger to the FF community, Im just now getting the gist of uploading, reviewing, you know the drill.

I like the way your going with this story, Leaves me craving the next one. Keep up the good work.

Heh. I think I get the clock thing (6AM is HR, etc.). Nice little addition there. ^_^ Glad to see you updated. (I actually stalk the NiGHTS and Klonoa categories almost daily. XP)

The characters seemed natural (although the 180 thing caught me off guard for a moment), the same words weren't used over and over again (it can get monotonous when 'the' pops up 10 times at the beginning of 10 sentences...in a row), and it wrapped up quite nicely. ^^ Good job.

(The only thing I couldn't get is why you put you were a liar. O_o)

O... I like Klonoa as a bounty hunter. ^_^ It's kind of fun to read. Not a fan of slash, but it seems to be working out well so far. (I really have to find time to read your other Klonoa fanfics. :P) Can't give any real criticism here since you really captured the characters well (loved the hamburger bit, heh heh) and this fanfic's just starting. I look forward to your next chapter. :)

Nice start! I can't wait for the next chapter!