Oh. Mokuba and Anzu interaction. I found it believable. They haven't known each other for so long, and even before they barely knew each other.

Anzu's teasing is so cute.

I like where it is going so far.

Shizuka's personality really surprised me in this chapter. She acts more like the Anzu she remembers and Anzu is more of the passive one. But then, everyone has their ideals and problems.

As far as the pacing- I think you were building the exposition up til now. Now it's time to start on the next step, or maybe that's what I really want to see Anzu do.

Sorry about your monitor.

I think this story is pretty cool!!

You portray varying kinds of relationships here which is nice, and I don't think I've read anything Anzu/Mokuba before. Its cute and funny, and I think Anzu is done well. And you show she has inner strength, there isn't those other characters always around for her to lean on, she's got to stand on her own. My only question is with the 'Kawai' family. Not only is the whole naming thing with them confusing to begin with, it really makes me wonder what their family situation is like. Why is she 'Kawai' but not 'Kaiba?' And she named her son after the father? That's cool, I guess. If I missed something in the story I apologize, it just reads (last name wise) like they're divorced and Seto the younger lives with Serenity. And is friendly with Mokuba. Right. But I love little Seto's characterization. Imagine the kid taking after Joey, that's hysterical and brings a lot to their group dynamics.

All around this is a great foundation for your story! I can't wait to read what happens next!

Considering that they've grown up, I don't think that anyone can really judge if they're OOC or not. But so far their characterization works. I found Anzu and Yuugi's conversation to be very real: awkward with a lot of things left unsaid.

And I really don't think the pairing is weird at all. They're both grown up, probably only 5 years apart and their relationship is starting to develop slowly, as old friends might. There's nothing strange about it.

You wrote this so bittersweetly, it's exactly what coming home feels like sometimes. I like the direction it's going so far, it's just really down to earth and believable. I can get a sense of what the drama might be later on, but so far I like the easy going feel of this story. And I adore that it's written from Anzu's perspective: she's a bit regretful but still tough and independent.

Beautifully written. I can't wait for more.