that was hot.

Hugs

Awesome. Maybe you should include this into the story and change the story's rating to include this outtake.

That was... HOTT! Jesus, i loved it! You are a great lemon writer!

Really good,

Please R&R mine

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thanks

OMG! that was really good! LOVES IT!

I liked that story it was quite interesting i mean i have never thought of carlisle in that manner before and well it was quite the treat i especially like your role play of Jasper being the big brother over protective type it is a nice other side to him and i really think it fits his part in Twilight you have done a great job and hopefully you dont stop writing soon because i and probably many others enjoyed that story possibly a teeny bit to much lol

That. Was. Brilliant.

Think I might like this more than the original version, hehe.

Hot damn that was good! Too bad its over! :(

i like this version better you should continue this one! )

Hello Mr Hot Bitch! Wowza

Totally HOT! Loved it!

your story is very sexy! i liked it alot! looking forward to reading the rest of your story!

I really liked this chapter, I just wanted to let you know why I didn't vote for it in the HB contest. It really is great as a chapter, or an outtake from Carried Away. But as a one shot, its a little confusing. There is a little bit of backstory that needs explaining. It was, however, interesting enough to get my interest and as a result I read Carried Away. And now I can't wait to read more of that.

So really, I just wanted to tell you that I did enjoy this, and I thought it was well written, just not great as a One Shot.

What? But... it's over? really? no more? I'm so sad. I was so into it, I'm a little dazed. Wow. Good job you.

now that was hot, I want to hear more of this story.