I like the story although it is really sad. Hmm quite emotional, you have done some mistakes in the story, I bet you already know what it is. Well I look forward for the next chapter, you have talent to be a writer thats what I think, so I will wait for the next update of the story. Keep up the good work!

Hey! Very, very nice. Love the idea, though the thought of my favorite character being dead is pretty sad. I'm going to stick around and keep reading this if you do continue it!

You seem to have potential as a writer. You're good with description and imagery, but I did notice a few mistakes here and there: typos, misspellings, a few grammar errors. I really am interested in this story, so if you would like, I'd be happy to beta it for you! I'm actually hoping to be an editor someday so it'll be good practice for me.

Anyway, please respond to this review when you get it! I'd like to know if you're going to continue the story, seeing as it's been a few weeks since you last put it up, and whether or not you'd like me to edit your work.

Good job!

Your right it was a horrible place to end it! I started to cry! Can't what to see how you get the next chapters rolling. Hope to see you update soon.

Good fic!