Nice chapter!
It's always really tricky to fight charmed characters... especially your stronger ones!
Of course you could just hit your characters to cure the conditon, but you'll might run into the problem of accidentally killing the character or getting that character K.O.ed!
Can't wait for the next chapter, keep up the great work! =)

Alright another totema has been defeated. I enjoyed the battle between them as I remember the problems I had with the charming as well. It was quite annoying since your characters are still weak in the beginning. Hmm I wonder if the group may be coming across a tome such as the one from Marche's world. But we shall have to see. Excellent installment.

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Peace Out BigDragun Style!

I guess anyone would be surprised and scared when they see something they fought before wipes the battle field clean!

Great job at writing, can't wait for your next update! =)

Hm. Ok ok another music prompt interesting. I'll start elsewhere though.

Aw that was pretty mean of Marche in the beginning but then no matter how kindhearted you are you will always fall prey to the annoyance of "Are we there yet." The words seemed to flow well enough. Glad to see Cecille is being nice and trying to take some of the weight off Marche's shoulders. Also you did the nice little small mention of fighting which I did enjoy as you are much better at that. One speeling mistake you overlooked. You misspelled tattoo.

Now for the music prompt section. Not bad but not stellar to me. I know shorter pieces like that are hard to find but even when I was reading my slowest I reached about 3:10. However I feel I didn't really need to go through all of it as the action and revealing if the totema was really all that required music. It just went on a bit long. It worked for a while then I found myself reading "The winner is Clan Nusty" but booming music was still going on. In all honesty I'm nit picking everything was fine. It was just small things that twanged strings.

Ezel is one of the character I like because of his personality. (Though in battle, I did't really use him because of the limited number of skills he has.D= )

Anyways, you did a nice job on the chapter! Keep up the great writing. =)

Alright we met Ezel. The story continues. Everything is getting more and more interesting by the second.

I'm a bit worried about the combat. Now granted I know you said that you were not going to focus much on that and I understand. In fact I applaud it because you don't need to. The only thing I want you to watch out for is combining real-time combat with turn-based. I noticed you seem to flow back and forth through it and as turn-base is a little difficult to write. It might be easier to do real time and focus on one battle between members at a time. However it's your story I'm just sayin it's something you gotta watch out for.

I loved this next piece and I can't wait for the next.

Stay Frosty!
Peace Out BigDragun Style!

Sweet chapter!
Nice job on writing! I really like the fight scene as well the the disscusion after the battle.
Boy, the other clan members must have alot of questions.
Keep up the great writing! =)

Ok Ok Alright Alright. I likes what I am seeing. No real big errors. Nice word choice. A few sentence structure things and at times it "seems" like ya go comma crazy. But all in all superb work. As you could tell I was waitin' for this lovely chapter to arise. I really enjoyed this. I could definitely sense the confusion between the members. However I like how Orsiny had to add the old Stick together thing that left feelin' all warm and fuzzy. It also got me thinking about later dates heh heh heh. Welp things can only get more complicated from here. Can't wait.

Stay Frosty!
Peace Out BigDragun Style!

P.S. I know it's definitely rough managin' two stories but I know you can do it bro. Just make sure ya don't fall asleep on either one as they both got excellent potential (Especially this one).

It'll be very interesting when Marche and Ritz clash with one another.
I'm looking forward to when the clan meet up with marche's brother!
Nice work!

Ah interesting. Now it's time to get into the meat and potatoes of the story. I can't wait to see how this unfolds. I enjoyed that little foreshadowing with Ritz from Orsiny. If you do go deep into the story I hope you show that part where Marche does indeed end up fighting Ritz as I am sure his clan will have interesting things to say about that. I also can't wait for the first Totema/World Thread destruction. It should be interesting see what you deem key points in the story for you to tap into and add your own little piece. On the editing not I didn't see much that had to be changed. You were good in most if not all categories so you're definitely good there. Can't wait for the next thing keep it up bro.

Stay Frosty!
Peace Out BigDragun Style!

Being kicked out of the academy... Well Cesare seems like an intersesting character.
I can't wait for the 2nd part! =)

Alright and as the first part comes to a close I must say I am enjoying this a lot. I has become one of the top stories that I have read on this lovely website and I can't wait for it to continue.

This was an interesting chapter that had me constantly thinking of double meanings to what was actually being said. In the first couple of paragraphs I thought you were going to go down a different road but I quickly dismissed it when I realized it wasn't your style of writing that I had come to notice. Going for the more intelligent speak that just a few quick laughs.

This Cesare character intrigues me though especially that little tidbit at the end. Getting kicked out of the Cadoan Academy eh? I wonder why heh heh heh...

Stay Frosty!
Peace Out BigDragun Style!

P.S. I meant to say this last chapter when you first started talking about making plots. Although I am sure you have got everything planned out and ready if you ever find yourself hitting a brick wall and want to bounce ideas. Don't hesitate to ask. I'd be glad to do whatever I could.

Poor Julian, he must feel prety bad...
The body bag, I the pity the friends of the person in it.
Though it's sad, this is a good chapter.
Keep up the awesome work! =)

Oh yeah buddy you best be bringing this up on a later date. You and that body bag. As soon as you skipped ahead those 3 days I was about to blow up but I had forgot you were doing that say a little leave a lot style. Nice way to keep me one my toes.

As usual nice stuff. Glad to see you took your time a little bit more with this one as the mistakes were to a severe minimum though I did catch an extra letter or two. It's all good though.

I also have some good news. Since I am heading back to college and am finally getting oh of the firm grasp of my work place you can expect to see chapters out the fly from my story within the next couple weeks. I have been stewing at my job popping ideas all over the place and I have just about doubled my story length. I can't wait for your next set and I can't wait to get back on the ball myself.

Stay Frosty!
Peace Out BigDragun Style!

Good job on the chapter, though there were some little mistakes here and there. Try to find time to check over work. Still this is great chapter. =)
I wonder what Chita will do in the clan...
Can't wait for your next update!