very nice to read, very good description(y)

This was a wonderful piece of fanfiction, a perfect extension of that scene! Thank you for a great read! ^_^

Aww. This was absolutely adorable. And your last line nailed it! It brought the entire piece front and center and it was perfect to leave it at the climax because we all know what happens after that. ;) Kudos to you. I really, really enjoyed this. I would absolutely love you to write another piece, actually.

Always,

Pyro

Really nice. I like your style of writing.

beautiful
ever been in love
i want to know what it's like, so i can write like this

Very good. Continue writing! I wanna hear more thoughts! :)

That was such a sweet story!

Aw, that's so cute! I like what you've done with the significance of the penguin comments. I'd really like to read more :)

Lol.. You write in a way that I can actually visulise whats happening. Nice chapter, it really gave some insight!
Thank you.