well, uh, maybe well written, but, uh, YUCK!

i dont think anyone thought of this paring yet...

"Honey is sweet, but the bee stings." -Anonymous

Actually, I got it from my coffee mug. XD.

~for exampled

The allegory is aesthetically pleasing. Though I think cranberries are sour in general. I do like Craisins. XD.

~for exampled

I love you.

I believe that this story is you new story, nest-ce pas? I reviewed your fictionpress story thinking it was the new one. Excuze-moi. I think the analogy in this story was really creative, and in GCS fashion without being GCS.
I'm really frizzled to type more about this composition, so I'll just commend you on the greatness of your righting. :]
Nice story.

Very beautifully written vignette. I wouldn't exactly call it Percy/Thalia yet, it feels more like she's thinking of him as her brother or close cousin (which is pretty much what he is). Nice job. Some would call this insane, true, but I think it's very artistic, in a sense.

Nice job.

Wow, those cranberries sound damn good. In the beginning, I meant. I wouldn't want to eat those after Thalia's done with them.

You want critique? O_o *scratches head* I don't think that I can give you any. It's so beautifully written, and has very vivid and wonderful description, imagery, and feeling. It's brilliant.

The only thing I can say is that you've accidently repeated the fanfic. I mean, your title and AN is at the beginning and then the fanfic starts. Then it suddenly cuts off and the title and AN appear again. You'll have to see it for yourself.

I love the way Thalia compares the fruit to herself and Percy. It makes sense, but it's like almost comical. In a twisted sort of way. The cranberries' sad fate is to be eaten by birds, abd Thalia's fate is to be killed by the gods/titans/insert other force.

I love Precy x Thalia. ^^ Can't wait to read Percy's point of view.

Keep up the good work!

Interesting idea, I really like it.
The fact that it was slilghtly confusing only reflects the way that Thalia is thinking at that point. She's confused, therefore it doesn't matter if the narration is also confusing.
Keep writing, I can't wait to see how the other half of this turns out :)
~TheAngel'sWings