OMG Kai is a drugadict!and i don't like Rei, but I guess it is because something happened to him, poor boy. And Tala, I love him more and more XDD

You know, for a girl without her Word working, you do really well, I'd be lost without the thing... D=



I started getting an awful feeling at the thought of Tala being trapped in a house with a braless Hilary. D=


But I got to say, this gets more and more interesting as we go along...probably because you're not telling us anything. There's so much left kinda...hanging in the air right now. But that's good, because it's only the beginning.


And Tyson's bit nearly made me sick. But in a good way. XD
Well, no, in the usual sense, but I always thought that if writing has a "real" affect on a person then it's doing its job...or rather, you're doing your job.


Another thing I'm loving is Rei's personality, it's refreshing to read him as a bastard of sorts for once instead of a sweet little kitty cat...hell, that's another thing that makes me wanna puke, but in the worst sense imaginable. :|
The way you're doing it though, makes me think about him in a different way. I'll never like him as a character, but I'm starting to see how he can be useful, without having to make him utterly pathetic.



So yeah, good chapter, hope you get your stuff back up and running soon. =D

Love it! You gave Tala just the right amount of creepyness. Can't wait for the next update ^-^

I was wondering what part Rei and Bryan were going to play. For some reason, I completely forgot about cops, lol. But anyway, loved the chapter. The intereaction between Rei and Bryan was awesome. The interaction between Hilary and Tala, and Hilary and Kai difinitely peaked my interest too.

Hm, I can't wait to read more. Hope you update soon!

I'm HUGELY sorry I didn't review this earlier. I was away all week and I'm only getting a chance now.


So, after a deliciously intruging chapter one, you've gone now and tossed a tonne of mysteries in my lap. I liked this chapter, I liked it a lot, but the suspenseful nature of the thing gives me the right to DEMAND a speedy update. :p


Nice job, as always. =)

aaww barely Kai and Tala XDD nice chapter!

What a brilliant second chapter, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was an interesting read, and I am very curious about the murder. I can't wait to see more from you, as it is a very promising story! =)

Update soon!

Brilliant chapter! I really enjoyed it. I love the two new main characters we have introduced now. Rei and Bryan, and their interactions, are quite fascinating. I'm intrigued by Rei aswell, and what's in that envelope...
Meanwhile...will Hilary be a victim? Tala and Kai's developing storyline is still gripping me, though we have more to focus on now. I really look forward to reading more of this, so update soon. ^^

Ohh...awesome start. I love it! I love the way you wrote Kai and Tala. Man, I wanna read more. I can't guess the movie but it wouldn't suprise me if I had never heard of it much less seen it.

I hope you update soon!

Oh. I think i know what movie this is based on. It's, um, murder by numbers, right? the one with Sandra. I really like it so far. Well writen and you picked the perfect charectors for it too. Keep up the good work. i look forward to reading more.

Wow what a great start to what looks to be a great story xD

I like the way you portray Kai and Tala in this, and it makes me eager to read more xD

Update soon! xD

i think i know the movie, is it murder by numbers? if it is i love that film too lol anyway loving the fic so please update soon!!

Unfortunately I can't guess the movie. And by the end it will probably end up being something I've never seen or maybe never even heard of.
But I don't mind, because I think I'll really love this one. You had me at the first sentence. Hell, you had me at the summary.
The characters already fascinate me, the writing was brilliant, and I can tell this plotline is going to get extremely tense. I really look forward to seeing more of this one.

OMG this was so great! Tala is nervous... but he wants kai! and i have no idea what movie is, but your writting something here, and i love your work, so i'll love your version of any movie XD

** me...=O


I haven't figured out the movie...but I sure as hell wanna read more of this. The whole thing is intriguing to the point of being torturously suspenseful, I need to see this story finished, and it's only chapter one. I love your characters, expecially Kai, the bastard. XD


So, please do update. I have a feeling this is going to end up one of my favourites...=)