This is great.

I love how realistic it is. Only story I've encountered where they don't magically orgasm at the same time. And since when do teenagers know for sure if things like this will last?
You write so well; I like the mood you created. It was perfect for this type of story.

I'd write a better review, but I'm so lazy right now.

i love this story so much
that closing is so powerful
its like the definition of how i feel about someone so i really loved that ending
ur an amazing writer, ive loved all the stories youve written that ive read so far

I really like this!
it paints clear pictures, the words snare me with their magic, and it feels so real. it's so straightforward and soft at the same time. If I'd use colors to describe it, it would be red dark blue and yellow, all with a tint of deep purple. warm night-colors.

I love it

*cries* youre writing is so beautiful! *sobs* and again, all the emotions and the honesty and... *cries* youre making me miss my bf you evil amazing writer person...

Jesus Christ, Naruto thinks he's going through some heat right now? Dear Jesus I don't even want to know what I'd be feeling if they went all the way. ;.;

it's so sad :(
I don't want it (it, as in what they have) to end!
and I love how Sasuke always wants to feel superior and be in control xD

Damn... I swear you are one of the best NarSasu writers I've ever encountered... and this piece is most definitly no exception...

This was so amazing. it would make for a very interesting chapter fic...just a thought. Your writing is so good...i feel bad about my amature stuff...*goes to beat del into beta-ing suckish story* well...yah...great story!

love it!XD

So this is a fic that I've been meaning to review for a long time. I just wrote first person POV for the first time for Animehead's contest on ygal, so I completely sympathize with you on that point. First person is difficult to write, mostly because you're pretending to BE the person instead of writing what you think the person should be experiencing, and I don't plan on doing too frequently as a result.

That being said, I had a hard time believing this was Naruto. I hope I'm not being offensive, but you have such a lyrical way of writing, and I really enjoy that because it's very poetic, but I don't think that's the way Naruto thinks. Just my opinion of course.

But instances where you say things like "You’re a thoughtful specter..." "Where my tongue is impetuous and abrasive, yours is sly and cunning, both teasing and punishing me for my impatience" and "of your features enshrouded in shadow, the other in a translucently opaque glow from the omnipresent moonlight", I had a tendency to think, this is the way Rasengan writes, but this is not what is going through Naruto's head.

I did think there were times you hit it on the head as well. "A dog and its favorite chew toy" "I smirk at the way you jump because of the contact" "Because… to me… the uncertainty is all worth it." I thought those moments were really IC 'cause Naruto is brash and silly and he's happy with any true display of affection.

Moving on, I enjoyed the PWP aspect of this a lot. It makes me hopeful for your other fics, 'cause lemons are just fun, lol. I also liked the uncertainty of the piece. Naruto doesn't know what it is, and of course they aren't going to talk about it, and it just fit the two of them.

Delicious :3
That was truly, excellently written.
<3

yeeah, go yaoi! xD
you know, you always write you're stories so nicely :D
I bet no matter what kind of plot or subject you need to write about you will always make it intresting, just by the way you type it down ^^ so keep up the good work!
xx

Uh this was new. I'm not used to this, but it's great! Naruto's point of view is so honest and deep.
Saxsex sexy!
Right now I'm too lazy to write -_- .. but keep going. Want to know what will happen between them. Will it be just a teenage romance?
After all, nothing can be based on hormones.
Hope their love will take them further.

God, ass-grabbing gets me every time.

Once again, amazingly, beautifully written. Emphasis on the AMAZING. I don't think I need to tell you more, because you should already know by now :P

That was REALLY nice. You write first-person quite well. Well done, I enjoyed it muchly. :D