Oh, hey-- *you* wrote this. This is one of the best and most memorable Seth/Eirika/Ephraim stories I've read; it conveys the many disturbing facets of their dynamic in so few lines. After the ending, I wasn't sure how sorry I should feel for Seth-- or for any of them. Loved this line, especially: "She was not false; she loved purely, though she did not love him alone." No, love is not always an either/or proposition. I'd offer concrit, but I can't say much beyond "I don't generally like the drabble as a form," which isn't much help.

This is a very nice piece. I especially liked the mentions of Ephraim/Eirika (to be perfectly honest, I'm more a fan of E/E than Seth/Eirika) considering that Ephraim's existence is an important part of the Seth/Eirika dynamic that many writers neglect to mention.

I think "callouses" should be "calluses".

Anyway, this is sensual and quite well-written. Very good work.

THrought it's hard for me to accept a physical Eirika Ephraim (even if they seem to do a nice pair - but that's out of topic)

I cherise the shipping you favored in this piece. I have read too much Seth Eirika to tell who is really IC and who is not now, but he was nicely presented.

I did not undertand everything. Especially about the honnor matter. What would have Eirika done if Seth had said no ? Mary Ephraim ? And about her bro visiting her room at night, I mean, is Ephraim 'seing' her still, or is it her old room, and he, glooming over her statut change ?

The descriptions are fun. (Congratulations.) They look like some delicate meal prepared to be eaten. (yeah, I'm wreid)

It is great to be able reading FF8 from you. Thank for the sweet moment.

Hm, interesting start. I'll be keeping an eye on this to see how it goes. Interesting, very short though, but most first chapters are.

Content-wise, I saw no errors and you don't overwhelm with words and descriptions, a flaw in my own work I think. A nice, easy read. I'll admit though, I do hope for longer chapters later on.

Keep it up.