Good job. I liked it a lot. However, was the barbaric comment needed? I dont really think so but i dont really care. Anyway, back to the praise, good job, I enjoyed it.

Nice one. I really really liked it. I disagree with the intro though I don't think what they were talking about was all that deep "I dazzled him with my...wits..."

PS. We may be barbarians but at least we can all spell centER

loved the story, thought it was cute. needs just a tad more... feeling though. oh and barbaric my ass. we may be a hell of allot more eccentric, but there is no need to be hateful. thanks.

*squeal*
your overactive imagination is awesome.
xx shroom.

Excellent.

You've managed to catch the gist of their relationship. I really enjoyed it. You also give quite a bit of depth into Patrick's character, instead of the not-quite-so-vile character that he's been given in the movie. I like that.

A few things I want to mention however, is that you could be a little more descriptive in things. Such as 'detention students'. That was kind of... brief. You don't get much of a picture about it. You can say something like, 'the woefully left behind detention students'. That would give it more detail, and a little more pomp to the sentence.

There are some other areas in the story like that... such as the word 'the entire night had been a setup'. It comes on kind of blunt, with no feeling. On the other hand, if you had 'horribly base setup' or something like that, then the readers get more of a 'feel' to it. You know what I'm saying?

Hope you can use that to improve on your story :).

Brill :]

Really good. U got the characters perfectly

This Definitely should have been put in the movie! "-" fills in the gaps nicely, the characters were totally believable and makes me want to watch the movie again! hmm i might just do that :D Patrick is soo hot..hehe Pat & Kat xox

Precious! I love Kat and Patrick's banter. The dialouge you wrote for them fit their characters well - it all seemed like things they would have said in the movie.

On the other hand, sometimes the present tense sounded a little awkward or got mixed up. Besides that, it was very well written. It was expressive and descriptive without being too wordy.

(PS We are not barbarians! ...Okay, well maybe sometimes. Haha)

You say you're not good at banter? It was funny and cute and shippy. That makes it good banter. Thank-you!

I'm grinning like an idiot- I loved it.
You stayed in character and created a banter that was both lighthearted and touching, staying true to the mood of the movie :)