 Oceaniad 2009-11-26 . chapter 1You want to get better... I don't know how I can offer you any criticism, though. Maybe I'm having an emotional day, but I cried...
Butters baking the cupcakes was amazing. I was very surprised when Kenny revealed that there was nothing in Kyle's, and I began crying when I realized Stan was incarcerated because he had a big heart, I suppose because he couldn't forget.
Please write the second part soon. I will definitely be waiting. |
 Marie of Romania 2009-11-09 . chapter 1I'd love to see part two. What did Stan do exactly to get into prison? I'm really liking this one. It's good even if it's unfinished.
~RG~ |
 jessica 2009-11-02 . chapter 1 Foodstamp, while I very much enjoy your stories, there's a little rule that they taught me in school: Don't introduce your story with these self-depreciating intros! There's nothing wrong with writing an author's note, but please don't spend the entire thing bad-mouthing yourself, your writing ability and EVERY ASPECT of this fic!
I mean, I might have really liked this fic! But when I read that your opinion of it is all "character bastardization" and "This is too dialogue-heavy. I hope it’s readable." I begin to wonder if maybe I shouldn't have!
Please, don't taint a new reader's opinion of your work before they even get a chance to form their own! Don't apologize for things that a reader might not even notice! |
 mimarin 2009-11-01 . chapter 1Writing a story with Stan as a convicted pedophile (was this inspired by that Kevin Bacon Woodsman movie?) takes some grade-A balls, and now I mildly hate you because it's 3:39 a.m. and I can't tear myself away. I want to seize your funny, humane, smirky, hard-working Kenny and marry him forever. Butters baking the symbolic cupcakes is screamingly original and sweet and sad. I rofled at cupcake Craig's overabundance of frosting and Kenny's crack about baking Cartman's cupcake in a flowerpot.
What does it say about Pip's character that I can buy him as both a priest and a prostitute? |
 Novacaine-chan 2009-10-29 . chapter 1Oh my God, I just... absolutely loved this. I was never good at writing reviews, but believe when I say this was just awesome.
I really hope you continue this soon, if at all. |
 Tawni 2009-09-27 . chapter 1 Butters is so cute<3
Pleasepleasepleaseplease update soon-- it seems like a good story in the making.
Don't be afraid to pull back the curtain on some of the twisted creepiness of this fic in chapters to come. Stan's dark, damnable side needs to fully come out of the closet. I'm curious to see the contrast between Stan's remorseful, genuine character and his implicated warped past. |
 KennyIsASexyAngel 2009-09-12 . chapter 1:D
Why do i have a feeling you aren't continueing this? Are you...?
Really good, i love how you portrayed Craig perfectly!!
But i, personally, wouldn't have put Kyle and Wendy together?! >.<
Still good story though... :) |
 Pahoyhoy 2009-09-12 . chapter 1I'm not really good with reviews. I don't do it very often, and I don't ever give constructive critisism. Your stories, however, make me feel something and just for that I need to tell you how wonderful they are.
You are truely an artist with words. Thank you. |
 squirt1122 2009-08-24 . chapter 1love it... want to read more of it |
 rose.tinted.lies 2009-07-26 . chapter 1I love this story, and can't wait to read more :] |
 BlackRoseMuffin 2009-07-11 . chapter 1Wow. ._. That's all I can say. Just... Wow. |
 YouMustBeJoking 2009-07-08 . chapter 1I loved it! I can't really think of any criticism, but I loved it! :D
Now, if you would like to continue living, THERE WILL BE A SECOND CHAPTER. >:( :D Thankies. |
 Evil Chibi Kitten 2009-07-06 . chapter 1This fic so far is just, i can't even place words on how damn good it is. please please PLEASE update soon! |
 The Brat Prince 2009-07-03 . chapter 1WOW. Just, wow. I can't believe I didn't read this before. It's fascinating. I'm just...wow, speechless. I can't wait to see the rest. |
 momijikk 2009-06-28 . chapter 1...Oh my gosh.
...I can't even begin to think about how badly I want to know how this ends.
...Yikes. Just...Yikes.
...This is powerful. You're a pretty good writer. There were some parts that were confusing and scrunched together, but I muscled my way through those to see how it ended. It's drawing with its power and mystery, and overall very telling in an emotional sense.
This makes me want to read the next part a lot.
Good luck with updating (if life gives you problems, and all), and please put part two up soon.
-MomijiKK |