It's interesting to see a new character, however as another reviewer pointed out, you need to be careful she doesn't turn into a Mary Sue (look it up if you don't already know what it is). I know it's your story, but in order for the reader to be convinced of your choice to add an "8th child" and therefore emotionally buying into the story, you need to justify it by fleshing the character out-- show us why she is unique and you could not use any of the other 7 to explore those facets. Also, perhaps it's too early on in your story to know, but although you said "I'm not making this stoy exactly like the movie, that would be boring", imho you made this latest chapter *too* much like the movie. Apart from the addition of Emily and a few internal thoughts (which is a good addition), this is nearly a word for word repeat of the movie, plus screen directions. You don't have to alter the plot of TSOM, but what a lot of good TSOM fanfic writers do when writing about scenes already in the movie is concentrate on the character's thoughts and expand the scene, keeping the original, basic scene there while adding new bits that we don't see in the movie. That way it's faithful to the movie and original. I hope I didn't sound too harsh. Hope to see more from you.

I'm glad that it's not exactly like the movie, that would make it a little dull in my oppinion. ;) Love the story so far. Looking forward to reading more!

Nice! I like Emily!

The premise for your story is interesting, but I have just a little constructive criticism for you. You need to spice up your vocabulary a little bit without making it purple prose. Use sentence variation, in the story the structure and length of your sentences are fairly uniform, so variation makes it just a little more interesting. Watch your grammar and use of colloquialisms. Having an original character is a great twist, but be careful and round her out a bit if you keep on this path you could make the character a Mary Sue so just be wary there are many facets to a personality and they cannot be everywhere and be involved in everything. But overall a great start.

Well done! Can't wait for more!

I really like this - I too, always thought that there should at least be one child who finally says "Enough is Enough! He can't treat us like this anymore. But in my case, I used Brigitta, as she's always been my favourite. Keep this up