OK, i see you have potential as a writer, however you need experience and perhaps a book by one of the great writers to help you learn how to present your story, (it improved my writing when i read the harry potter novels from a studnet perpective).

instead of this sentence "OOH I hope brother is doing ok." says Nobunagas younger sister Oichi."

you should create a paragraph that estabishlis oichi and Keiji. Such as (outside the castle as they fought, lady oichi and keiji maeda stood wondering how the battle would go. Oichi said with concern "Oh i hope brother is doing ok."

Keiji who lived for war replied back as bold as ever replied ""I do not care just as long as I get to live and fight in another battle."

You create parahraphs like this you will enrich your story greatly which will lead to more hits, and increase your chance of recieving reiviews, especially among the more talented writers in this section. good luck.

Better hope Nobunaga and Mitshuide don't run into each other and start a street swordfight...

Am I the only one following this story ? Wow.

Your story is pretty good, but the spelling and grammer mistakes are starting to distract me...run future chapters through an ONLINE SPELL-CHECKER, such as the one that comes with microsoft word...or google one and use it.

P.S. I am NOT bashing your family nor anyone else who has proofread this document.

Mitshuide is a son of a @#$%& !

LOL

By the way, if you reply to my review, plz tell me if you're old enough to view profanity so I don't have to filter it later.