Read all 3 chaps and it was enthralling. Couldn't stop reading.

You move the story along well.

I really like how detailed you were, I was growing very attatched to poor Jonathan. His fate was very realistic though, great job.

Please keep up with the writing!

Poor Jonathan, he had a rough time. :(

Wow, it's good to see other stories coming in here! Well done, very realistically portrayed but i thought there was a little too much dialogue. Still, it was good! Thanks for posting!