I liked this! Very very cute. Great look into their characters and their relationship.

KrisEleven~

I admit to forgetting most of the subplots and names of Tortall universe, so I've got about at 2% understanding of what's going on, but the writing is sound and well-paced.

I can't help but feel a little sympathy for Vania. This is the second time that I've read this, and the first time, my thoughts were influenced by the other Vania-themed drabbles, which contained incestuous material, but now that I've come back with a clear head...

Well, now it seems to me as though she could almost be mistaken for Kalasin (who has been shipped off to Carthak?), and we all know that the two eldest Conte siblings were supposedly very close; this could be construed to say that Vania's a poor, and unwanted, substitute for Roald's favourite sister. Not only this, but Vania's one of the youngest Contes, is she not? Sometimes the baby of the family is also pushed away and ignored... which is sad, yes, but it happens.

Or there is my other theory, where she is almost similar in appearance to Shinko, who may have died some time before this drabble.

Well, whatever it is, it's certainly got me thinking. I love it!

~ KJ

Well written. ff dot net killed your punctuation a bit-- only after Vania's 'but'.

I don't know if the "invitation she is intending..." actually makes sense. It seems very awkward to me.

I really enjoyed this, especially the bottom half. I think it carried tremendous feeling. I didn't get the feeling behing Roald, though. For some reason I got the hint of something dark (and with the types of fics I've been reading about Vania lately it made me think something incestuous, which I don't think was your intention), so i would have liked to know exactly what was behind his rejection of her company.

Excellent writing and structure.

KrisEleven~