I know this is probably really late and you've probably moved on but I really enjoyed this first chapter. Personally, I love Scion and Stargate, put those two together and its gold. So I hope you continue and if you need a beta, I'd be happy to help.

A great story.
combining a Great Game system & a Great TV series is perfect.

Especially Stargate SG 1 & Scion.

Stargate: SG 1 + Scion (Hero Level?) = A story worth being written on pages of gold

Okay, you have my attention. It will be interesting to see where this is headed. :)

Wow, don't see to many Scion crossovers. Looking forward to this.

P.S. Love your works.

Well... I don't know anything about White Wolf, so I might have some problems following some parts, but it could be an interesting story...

"“Well, not just Cthulhu,” Acacia noted, embarrassed." :-D This one was excellent! I wonder how this comment will be received...

good

basics are good, but the asguard? what about the the 'greys'?

your work is good. keep it up

Interesting.

By curiosoty, What game of White Wolf is this based on?

Kinai.