aww, poor saphir.

Creepy. The final line totally got me.

I love this so much. Poor, poor Saphir. ;__; The repitition of "It doesn't bleed, it simply leaks" was absolutely horrifying. And I do love sarcastic!Jade when he grows up, but your take on him as an indifferent, cold child has kind of eaten my brain. Totally messed up, but really, really cool.
I love all of your TotA fics. I'm so glad that such a talented author is writing about the Keterburg group~

I. Adore. This. I can't really think of anything else to say.

Even though this was a short piece, I liked it. So sad how Saphir kept trying to tell himself that it didn't bleed, but leaked like a fonmachine. T^T Poor Saphir would do anything for Jade.

Thank you for sharing!

poor dilusional Saphir... as much as it pains me to admit this, i suppose it was Jade's fault he turned out to be an infamous God General. On the other hand, Saphir always was a bit of a numpty, so there you go!
Very well written, I think the repetition of his thoughts when he was trying to convince himself it was alright stood out, proving the fact that although he was telling himself that it WAS ok, he knew deep down it most certainly wasn't.
However, I ramble. Like I said, very good, and I hope to read more fom you.
Black-Dove15 xx

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Yeah, I am't gonna say much more then the other people have. ^^ It's a good job, and totally likely. I just got off my 1984 reading, so I'm really in the mood for this sort of thing. *thumbs up*

Saphir is just the best sidekick in the world. He's like the asisstant Igor to the Dr. Frankenstein. Creating life in all its shining glory.

But gosh, Jade was such a creepy kid. And the ending was absolutely haunting. All those repeating lines made it seem all the more terrifying.

This site needs more stories like this.

I'm really glad you posted this. It's so good!

Very interesting take on what probably happened. I can definitely see it having been like this. Poor Dist. D:

I'm sorry I can't make any coherent compliments besides telling you that it's really good. You're a wonderful writer! :'D

Wow. Just...wow. This is so incredibly good...I could totally see this having happened pre-game. Probably more than once.