Nice little short story. It's almost like a poem. This is the only only grammatical mistake I see "This wish that could he could never have?"

Well, that green button IS enticing...

Interesting, short little story. I believe I've seen a few Chobits stories on this site with a similar theme, but it's been so long since I last browsed the archive, I can't say for sure.

Regardless, it is an interesting subject as far as the series is concerned. A brief lay-out of an ordinary day between Minoru and Yuzuki ... a quick, enjoyable enough read, that's also reflected in the series. I personally like this story, as I show similar interest to the subject it's built upon.

I can't say too much, as this is a bit short, but I think you get what I mean. I saw no grammar errors if that counts for anything, which it does as far as I'm concerned. I see no contradictions to the series either, and the same to all other technical details.

Not bad. Overall, I think my time reading and reviewing this story was spent well. :)

Now, as for that free persocom you promised... :D

What's the anime? Don't think I've ever read that series. Is it good? Liked the fanfic, I think I did.