OMG i love this story looking forward to your next chapter

p.s. love the trailer on youtube, i would so go and see it if it was a real movie

hey, been reading both this and GHI. i must say before i read GHI i had never heard of that show, but im really into it i love your story please update GHI,

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE THIS STORY I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOREVER FOR IT TO BE UPDATED IM SO IN LOVE WITH IT

this story is amazing, besides a few grammeratical and spelling errors. the story line is intriguing and aluring. please update i can not wait for more

Awe poor Amber has a bad reaction to Bentley I hope she works threw it cause they would be such a cute couple.

Omg I knew it! I knew Bentley was a shifter!

Awesome chapter!

this was the best ch yet! i really liked it! update soon!

omfg i lovee itt xD i still think there should be a chapter wiff Roxie's POV. and then like havve a guy that changes her life, and like even though she dosnt trust anyguy's love. ) i love this soo much P

I loved his point of view I have to say I was confused at first because I didn't read Bentley POV at the top but I eventually got it and am extremely excited to see what is going to happen in the next chapter.

Well, I like the sequel idea, but I wouldn't really want it to be a crossover, but it's up to you, so either one would be okay to me. This chapter was much better than the last two, so nice job! The only thing I could see wrong with it was word confusion(i.e-replacing That with Than, and with are, etc.) and that's pretty much it. So good job! I really wish I could read on, but I have to my cousin's house who lives in Richmond, so I gotta go! I'll review more chapters tommorrow!

Oh, so Shay is gonna have Jasper's power, and Amber, I'm guessing, is gonna have Edward's. Huh, Amber has Bella's personality, yet she has Edward's power. Shay has Alice's personality, yet Jasper's power. And I'm guessing Roxie's gonna have Rose's personality, yet Emmett's strength. Interesting. lol. You know the drill. Punctuation, grammar, spelling, past-present tenses, sentence structure, etc. Watch out for those. I strongly reccomend that you look over and edit your writing before posting it to avoid these mistakes. But I seriously love this story! It's going great! I'm going to TRY to review the next chapter, but if I don't, you'll know why. Bye!

Yup, Grace is DEFINITELY like Esme. And...um, if you're revising chapters, I strongly suggest that you redo this one. It has a LOT of mistakes in it, and I think you'll catch them if you read over this chapter. That's all I have to say. I think that if you read over this chapter, you'll see what I mean. Sorry if that sounded mean. Kay, next chapter is definitely the last one I can review today before I have to go. Bye!

Oh shit! Brie's dead, and the rest of them are going through The Change! Holy mother of crap! lol. Oh and I have two more comparisons, by the way. Lester-Carlisle, and Grace-Esme. I wonder if there will be an emmett or a jasper or even an alice. lol. Anyway, the way some people speak in this story seems...unrealistic. It's like they speak the way they think.I mean, really, look at some of the things they say. Honestly, would you speak like that in real life? Sorry if that seems mean, or snobby, or harsh. That's just the only way to describe it. Also, watch your punctuation. Sometimes, you're missing a comma, or you have too MANY commas, etc. Anyways, I think I only have time to review the next chapter, and then I think that's all I can do today. But I'm really liking this story so far, so don't worry. If you don't get more reviews today, you'll get more tommorrow. Kay, I'm gonna stop babbling now, and review the next chapter! Bye!

Huh so Vicente is like James, Natalia is like Victoria, and I think Juliet is kinda like Jane and Rosalie combined. lol. Again, in this chapter, you switched between past and present tense. Remember to watch out for that. But other than that, I can't really think of anything else that went wrong in this chapter. And I like that you took a PART of steph meyer's books, but revised it, and made it your own. That's a really...good(?) thing to do. And you're right, Vicente IS one sick twisted dude. lol. How do you pronounce Vicente anyway? I'm not sure. Anyway, I'm going to read on now! Bye!

DEFINITELEY evil vamps. Not the casper-the-friendly-ghost type of vamps. lol. Wow. I'm seriously hooked now! This is just like a real novel! Good job! You use their emotions well, but still, you don't really elaborate on them. For example you could say this: "As I looked into the endless pools of crimson that I saw in the eyes of the creature, I felt a shiver of fear travel down my spine, settling in to the pit of stomach, and felt terror paralyze my whole body." Eh, not my best, but you get the point. Also, you switched between past and present tense periodically in this chapter, so again, watch out for that when you write. Anyways, I started cracking up when I read the thing about the christmas play. That was hilarious! And that seriously happened to you? Wow, I feel sorry for you. But did you say that, or another person in the play? Kay, I'm going to go read on now, so...bye! .

OH S*! Here we go! We're finally getting to the part with the vampires! Hell yes! lol. Finally escaped the migit demons from . Anyway, by the picture on your site, Amber seems kinda depressed, so it's kinda hard for me to imagine amber being scared, or giggling, or even smiling. I guess it's just me though. lol. But I think you should have provided a little more information about Lester Harper in this chapter. Like what his relation to Amber and her family is, except in more detail. Oh and also, at the beginning of this chapter, Amber thought, "-I ran up the brick steps without tripping on them—thank god," Well, is she usually clumsy or something like that? Or is she just so excited that she's not worried about her balance? Because if she's clumsy, it might effect her abilities later in the story or something like that. lol. Sorry if I sound bossy or snobby or controlling. I just don't know how to say it any other , I'm going to go read and review the next chapter for this, so...bye!