Cool chapter, especially because the american episodes for this came out a couple weeks ago. But, you know what I hate? Grmmjow's last name in the English version. I like Jaegerjaques, not Jaggerjack, it makes him not sound Spanish, and all the Espada are supposed to have Spanish names, not ones that sound like a six year old with an overactive imagination thought up, you know? Again, great chapter though

cute!! luvd it!

I haven't read any of your other stories, so I have no clue about the other ones, but this thing is DENSE! I mean, maybe 8-10 pages in Word for...maybe 30 minutes to an hour of actually time? But it's good! Usually, dense is a bad thing, b/c of too much description or flowery sentences and stuff like that. But I think you've captured the Ichigo and Rukia's feelings and thoughts very very well. You really got inside their heads while writing this. And I like the slow development so far. It's nicely detailed, and your grammar is excellent. Keep up the good work, and update soon!

no!
update soon!!