I got goosebumps reading. C.S. Lewis was an amazing writer to leave things to the imagination. But I really want to know what he would want to happen to Susan. I love what you did though. Great job!

I have always been bitter about what happened to Susan in these stories. As a kid I was confused and bitter, as a disenfranchised college student I was angry and bitter, and these sayd I lean more towards just sad and bitter. But I really like your take on why she may have behaved the way she did, and you give me a little ray of hope for what happens to her afterwards, something C.S. Lewis never did. Thanks! Well written, coherent, and intriguing. Favorited!

Such a twisted ending could be either hopeful or not. It's sad. (The fic, not the way the ending is written.)

Splendid! Sometimes the living _do_ have the harder task. But Queen Susan the Gentle will find a way.

This is absolutely heart wrenching, to see her choices, and the path she takes, and how she tries to make do with what she thinks she has. I love the way you described her view of Narnia, and life, and what they both mean. The idea of yielding as a virtue was also very well used; very Daoist, and rather refreshing, as most people seem to view yielding (especially in Susan) as a sign of weakness. I'd love to see more one shots like this (or even anything longer) :)

Oh. OH! That's! But! Incomprehensible, because I can't spoil it for anyone who read's the reviews! gaah... @.@

Still -- lovely bit with the conversation, even lovelier with the imagery... though for some reason, a tube of lip stick keeps becoming a sword, and a compact, a shield. Very odd.

The ending? Pure Win.

You have some truly beautiful usage of language here- you know how to use it and you do so to the best possible effect. The comment of "Not everyone is taken living into heaven." was particularly striking to me. And I think you've captured Susan very well here; she's not angry like so many, but simply trying to live, to fit into a world in which she no longer belongs.

Amazing. That's really all I can think to say. It's very well written and very in character. I'm sorry I can't ccritique it more or pinpoint exactly what I like about it. The whole thing. It was just...

Amazing.

Wow. This is really really good, I love the...everything in this!

wow loved this one shot my favorite lines were " I would rather become a stranger to myself than hate him. I'm not strong enough to stand alone against this world" and loved Edmund's replay of " who says you'd be alone", because that line is so true in realaty. I love book canon Pevensie espically Susan wonderful please write more one shot like this

This is so lovely. I've always loved Susan, even if Lucy is my favorite, and you characterized her so well here. I've always felt horrible for her, that her whole family died, left her alone, and went to their version of heaven; and since she stopped believing in that heaven, the chances of her finding them were almost nil. Also, I wanted to kill Peter in the books when he said that Susan was no longer a friend to Narnia (I think it was Peter who said that). Because she was, she just couldn't bear to remember it. I think you really captured the fact that it wasn't her fault or her siblings' fault that she got left behind. That, in the end, she didn't get left behind at all, instead choosing to stay behind. People make wrong choices sometimes and it's hard to admit that to yourself. Although, dying young doesn't really sound like a 'right' choice, but in this context, I guess it is. She was just trying to do the best with what she was given, and even if a lot of people dislike her for that, I respect her for it.

Oh, that's lovely. This is how I like Susan portrayed, because it's how she is. *sighs happily* Beautiful, beautiful phrasing and writing, I especially liked the first paragraph.

Oh, I liked this. It's beautiful in that you portrayed Susan not as completely denying that Narnia was a game, but that she always remembered even though she buried it deep inside of her. For her, knowing that she was in exile, she accepted that and did what she could to live in this world with her sanity intact. And while Peter says she's no longer a friend of Narnia, it seems as if she truly still is though he didn't see that. It looks like Edmund may have seen the truth though. This Susan I feel will definitely make it to Aslan's country one day.

At first I wasn't going to read this seriously, because there are so many stories about Susan out there. But once I started reading this, I found myself being drawn in. You certainly have a way with words, as well as a way of looking at Susan that makes her seem like a real person, rather than a villain or a saint. My favorite line was this: "So I fight what I can't endure and endure what I can't fight, and trust that Aslan will help me find the balance." I also thought this was a fantastic allusion: "Not everyone is taken living into heaven. Most people simply live as best they can."

Bravo! This is excellent... thank you for writing it!

I like the profoundness of this, the dialogue was very deep and philosophical. Exquisite.