that was so good! please continue!

that was so good! please continue!

wow. this is really really good!

it really feels so far like a kenneth oppel book. your style differs from him but the plot seems very solid so far. )

the only thing that i really am going to suggest is maybe more description of his surroundings and perhaps where and why he is where he in life.

does that make sense?

You've got me hooked. I want to know what happens next!

Just one small thing, um, when you have dialogue you put it like, for example,

"Oh, I'll do more than lay a finger on her" he chuckled

You want to put a comma after her, like,

"...finger on her," he chuckled.

But honestly don't worry about it. I make my fair share of grammar mistakes. (Once I wrote "I now" instead of "I know".) Just trying to help some.

Mhmm... I wonder if we will find out what the title means... Kite...Mhmm...

Great job, though. Excellent! Keep updating, though!

wow that was really intresting. lol ur really good at leaving cliff hangers. please update soon cant wait

GREAT START TO STORY. KEEP IT UP!

this really intrested me...u should keeping going...ill be happy to read it

yay another skybreaker story :)

the chapter was very realistic although i thought that matt was just a tad ooc (i don't think he would get lost in the park, hes a smart character)

but other than that great start

and wow what a cliffy lol

write up the next chapter quick or the cookie monsters gonna eat you o_O