damn good story i enjoyed the entire thing c ya around

I've seen more "Harry get's a nifty Power"-fics than I care to remember (still, more than half are better than canon, which is saying something given the average quality of fanfiction). I've seen several "Different Boy-Who-Lived", both the actual "trope" and subversions of it.
I think you're the first to soup-up Harry, and throw in not one, but three other "Vanquishers" to deal with snake-face.

Great fic, a bit rushed in the end, and it could use some continuation (I'm a big fan of the "Open Door", "Fight For Life" and "Make A Wish" style series... #Hint-Hint#), but overall, pretty good. Could use some fleshing out though.

Really enjoyed this fic. My only complain is wish it was longer. I'm going to try Rogue next. Hope you do another non-H/G fic in the future (yep i've read The Grass Is Always Greener too).

Really interesting story. It's believeable, and I think that is the best thing. Great work!

great story!

this is awesome!

harry goes to an english primary school and therefore would not be in a "second grade class" he would be in reception, yr 1, yr 2 ect up to yr 6

great story!but you never told us what happened to malfoy and what girl he got pregnant?

This is a continuation of my previous review, covering chapters 4-6.

Ch 4: And again, Dumbledore shows his second face. After all, he is the great and powerful wizard of Oz. Why should he tell anyone anything?

I'm actually surprised that Snivellus didn't storm up and grab Harry by the throat, snarling: "How DARE you!?!"

On the other hand, Harry has undermined Dumbledore in public. The old bastard cannot allow that to continue or he'll lose any kind of hold he has on...pretty much everybody. Once Amelia becomes involved, the case is going public and then Dumbley's goose is really roasted.

I wonder if Dumbledore was disappointed at Harry's lack of reaction to Umbridge. After all, this version of Harry has no love for the old bastard and no reason to defend him.

Having surrogates check out books for him is brilliant.

And so, he handles Drakey like an errant peasant. His message being: "You're not worth my time, boy!" Personally, I'd have knocked him on his arse, but then, my policy is to never allow anyone to draw a weapon on me.

I wonder if Albie knows that he's got a mutiny on his hands?

Nice set of...rewards.

I would be surprised if Dumbledore didn't have some method of diverting Harry's mail to himself.

~*~BOY-WHO-LIVED FOUND!
ONLY TO BE KIDNAPPED BY DUMBLEDORE!~*~
Hey Dumbley! SLAPPO!

Can you say: 'Full Disclosure'? I knew you could!

And now, the cops arrive. Ol' Twinkles ain't gonna like that!

Following Harry's revelations, Dumbledore is in a world of trouble. Without his titles and positions to safeguard him, he will actually be held accountable for his actions. (Gasp and swoon!)

Much as I hate it, it looks like Shack, Tonks and Hestia are going to be looking for work soon.

A nice turnout with Snape. As I've frequently said, he shouldn't be within a thousand meters of any child.

Dumbledore's political clout is actually a tool I'm using in several of my own fics. It is nearly impossible to imprison someone who has such power and unfortunately Dumbledore has both the backing and the power.

It's a shame Arthur was sacked. Dumbledore has many ways of encouraging or even compelling loyalty, and like Voldemort, he doesn't really care what happens to his followers. On the other hand, Arthur s a big boy and knew what he was doing was both wrong and illegal.

OK, that settles my question as to the brooms. Now Harry doesn't have a thirty year old Comet.

Ch 5: Ron's reaction was as expected. He always did lead with his emotions. Ginny on the other and I'm not certain of and the twins, seem to have accepted as you said. If anyone, they are the ones to watch out for. Still, they were almost ready to go public by this time in canon. Possibly Harry or Remus can direct them to Sirius for funding. I'm certain that it would be their greatest wet-dream to have the infamous Padfoot as a partner. (I wonder if they know?)

Harry seems to be in a habit of smacking Dumbledore down hard.

While Harry screwed up, he let the girls down as easily as he could. If he'd gone further in their relationship, he would have hurt them both immeasurably. That kind of hurt never goes away.

Malfoy was stupid...again. I've been in firefights both as a police officer and as a Marine, an they(at least the civilian ones) are over very quickly. Malfoy's mistake was that he didn't fight to win. He fought to hurt. Harry fought to win and Malfoy has a broken neck because of it. I wonder: If Malfoy becomes a paraplegic will Lucius 'arrange an accident' for him? To the eyes of a status conscious bigot, it wouldn't look good for the scion of the Malfoy family to be riding a wheelchair.

And so, the escape is on. Dumbledore knows and he is absolutely furious! Bwahhahaha!

And now, Dumbledore has a busted wing and Harry has the Elder wand (assuming you used this horrible plot device.) I'll bet Dumbledore is frothing at the mouth!

A well played escape, Well done, sez I!

I checked the map and for Harry to approach Dublin from the north, he would have had to overfly some very hostile territory for at least three hundred miles. Interestingly, the closest part of Britain to Dublin would have been Wales. Equally interesting, is that Anglesey is the closest place there, and is where I normally place Godric's Hollow. It's also where Holyhead is. Just FYI. An hour and twenty minutes of flying time to cover that distance would mean the broom had a speed of nearly two hundred fifty miles per hour. Also FYI.

~*~Amelia Bones walked through Hogwarts with four Aurors flanking her, wondering what the problem was this time.~*~
Why do I hear Darth Vader's theme?

So it looks like Dumbledore is going to be doing some jail time, and better, the rapist is in custody as well. (What else would an Imperius, vanishing and contraception spells be used for?)

there should have been some traces...of Harry's blood if nothing else. While he closed up the wound and cleaned his clothing, you never mentioned if any red-stuff leaked.

~*~“This just came in via Express Floo Mail, Director.”~*~
Now that actually makes a -hell- of a lot of sense! It would be about a hundred times more efficient that owls. I do believe you have invented a brand new twist! It also complies with canon, as Molly fed Amos Diggory some toast through the floo in book 4.

~*~It was not hard to guess what Malfoy had done, with an Imperious curse, a contraception spell, and a Vanishing spell. The only real question was which young woman was the victim.~*~
I see you and I think along similar lines.

Ch 6: I disagree. IMO, Albie is the epitome of evil. Who but an evil creature would place a magical babe in the hands of magic hating child abusers, knowing ahead of time that was what they were?

Although there is no canonical support, The Potters must have left a will. I have one and I'm nearly as far from rich as you can get. In my will, the very first thing is the custody of my daughter. I cannot believe the Potters would neglect such a vital aspect. Harry was, according to Sirius, their very life...much as every parent. Additionally, given the antipathy Petunia has for Lily, Lily must have told Dumbledore, whom she trusted far too much, about that hatred. Further, Minerva watched Petunia and Dudley for the entire day after Voldemort was vanquished, and described them as the very worst sort of muggles. She described Petunia as a spoiling idiot and Dudley as a spolit tyrant...much like his father.

Beyond that, who but an evil creature would force an unprepared child into life and death trials, hoping that luck would save him? Dumbledore should be removed as headmaster and chucked into a psychiatric facility.

I also have to disagree aboutthis statemetn: ~*~Albus had the bigger problem of trying to control Harry, a young man who didn't care what really happened around him or what damage he wreaked, as Albus had nothing Harry wanted.))~*~
Had Dumbledore approached Harry as an equal, and spoken to him, just as you indicated, Harry most likely would have become curious enough to venture into the wizarding world. As it was, Dumbledore made the decision, and forced that decision down Harry's throat without so much as a 'by your leave'. In doing so, he obliviated Harry's 'sister' and thereby created a hateful and very dangerous person with nothing better to do than find a way to hurt Dumbledore. I'm honestly surprised Harry didn't try to kill Dumbledore every time he saw him.


Poor Harry! In any incarnation he's a trouble magnet!

Jean-Aimé Delacour want's his head and Apolline wants to thank him. Personally, I have to agree with Jean-Aimé's caution. Harry's presence just as they are attacked by Deez, is little too co-inky-dental.

I'd imagine by that time, Sirius and Remus would already be frantic.

Harry's interlude with the Delacours is a bit anticlimactic, though well written for all that. His signed immigration papers are one hell of a gesture, especially given that Remus is a were and Sirius is wanted for escaping Azkaban.


So, I was correct. Albie's political connections kept him from being punished for some serious crimes. Typical!

So, it took someone finally pulling his head out, and humbling himself to actually ask for help. [Stupid arse!] Since the only decent choice for Minister is dead, (I hope Susan is doing OK. JKR never even got into that.) Scumgouger is all that's left...other than the upper ranked Deez, that is.

As for the Prophesy, I laughed my head off. I had a theoretical discussion with my sister about the prophesy once, and we brought up all three points. First the prophesy never said, when, just: "...as the seventh month dies.", which could also have been the lunar calendar vice the Gregorian one, or even in September as 'septus' is seven in Latin. It never said the chosen one had to be British and it never said what year. Chuckle!

A nice fluffy little ending. Curing Remus of his lycanthropy might have been stretching the bounds of belief, but seeing Sirius become serious(sorry) about one single woman would be tearing those bounds apart!


An eminently satisfying story. I thank you.

Alorkin

This first half of my review will cover chapters 1-3. Please excuse it's length.

Ch 1: This is absolutely the most accurate portrayal of an intelligent but abused child, I have read. Harry is smart, but has zero trust for people. His reactions to those around him are quite typical of the abused children I've met as a police officer. Most children don't escape their torment because they either feel it is their fault, they believe nothing can be better, or that they've been filled with stories of workhouses, or hospitals where they will be chopped into little pieces for the 'good' little kids who need spare parts. (Those last two are the ones my father used to tell us.) .

It's funny you should use 'Gina' as a first contact. I have several fics in the works, one of which is also a Harry runs away, though he leaves at four, not seven. I also chose the name Gina as a girl in a group of teenagers who befriend him for the first few months of his freedom. When I feel it's ready, I'll post it on FicWad.

His actions at the flat are also well within character for an abused child, EXCEPT, that for most abused children, allowing physical contact takes far longer. On the other hand, he is, as Gina said, willing to do anything to stay.

You have the Headbastard as being more benign than I usually write him. I really don't like Dumbledore!

I have said before and I will likely say again that I believe Dumbledore knew precisely what he was doing when he placed Harry in a family that hated anything to do with magic. He wanted a meek, and malleable tool he could mould into a self-sacrificing weapon with which to destroy his own creation...Voldemort.

The Dursleys are as bad as in canon.

Albie better find some answers before McGonagall goes medieval on him.

While it is sad to break up the trio, Gina's sister and her friend provide a sort of continuity for a growing Harry. It's not perfect, but it's a lot better than Durzkaban.

I'd imagine Harry's letter didn't get through because he doesn't use his last mane. If he doesn't think of himself as 'Harry Potter', the magic won't take. Did that make sense?

Now, at fifteen, Albus has found his victim. his use of a stunner on Harry shows that he is not nearly as benign as most think.

Ch 2: A/N: Oh. OK.

While Dumbledore tells Harry he wants to discuss things with Harry, he, as usual, simply ignores anything Harry has to say. Evil Bastard!

Based upon that conversation, Dumbledore has made himself an enemy far more implacable that Voldemort. So it's all good.

Smart move, Harry. Never eat what your captor gives you unless you have absolutely no other choice. Bread is hard to contaminate, though not impossible, especially with magic, and the most obvious source of poisoning, would be in the pumpkin juice.

Hermione shouldn't be there at all. If Dumbledore set things into motion in what would have been Harry's first year, she would have been killed by the troll.

Nicely played escape. Too bad Dumbledore would have some kind of tracking charm on him.

Harry's plan was sound, though unfortunately, neither Gina nor Steph will be able to help him.

~*~Albus still did not totally understand why Harry was so reluctant to join them; most Muggle-borns were very excited to become part of the Wizarding world.~*~
Because he expects you to return him to prison, Jackass!

Damn, Dumbledore thought ahead!

Dumbledore has made a serious mistake. I have the feeling that Harry is gong to try to kill him at every opportunity. Snicker!

~*~He was not sure what he was going to do with Harry. Magic could only go so far unless he was willing to go into the Dark Arts, and he was not willing.~*~
No, but he does everything else!

Minerva is walking a fine line. Like Voldemort, Dumbledore will not abide anyone daring to oppose him. His 'light' personification is nothing more than a glamour.

Sirius' explanation of his situation is clear and succinct. In addition, shuld Sirius throw Dumbles out of his house, the headbastard could 'arrange' for aurors to watch this particular property. he could give them an 'anonymous' tip that the escaped mass murderer Sirius Black is in this house and as the secret keepr, he can allow them access...for the greater good, as it were. Sirius would be kissed and no longer a problem. If Remus objected, I have no doubt he would find a way to set him up too.

Dumbledore has literal control over their lives, as he writes the laws, he can claim he wasn't doing anything illegal.

I agree with Remus' assessment. Magic is all mental. Intent, determination and power. A proper visualization and enough power behind it, would produce the desired effect.

I'm willing to bet that the 'dark nature' of the wand, will get Dumbles to thinking that Harry will be a dark wizard. His thought processes aren't particularly clear as it is.

Unfortunately with her open opposition to Dumbledore's whim, Minerva has placed herself into the 'agin me' camp. Dumbledore's last words to her are troubling. “I believe you will regret this decision, Minerva,” If that ain't a threat, I don't know what is!

I can almost feel sorry for Hermione. Here she's got a perfect opportunity to learn something new and she's excluded. Sucks to be her! Snicker!

Ch 3: A/N: Year 1: OK, I can see her using a different bathroom. Your assertion about the mirror is flawed, though. Dumbledore does not kill, nor does he allow his minions to do so. That's what cost him so many losses in the first and presumably second war(s).

Year 3: Did Pettigrew remain with Ron, or did he bail as soon as he heard Sirius had escaped?

Year 4: An interesting twist, using Moody. I've seen it only twice before.

While the crash course is interesting and likely useful, why is Harry even trying to learn potions? Dumbledore only wants him as a weapon, so why place him in close proximity to an abusive bastard who, the first time he mouths off to Harry is going to get his arse handed to him?

Even Molly should recognize that harry is not a normal kid. Hell, my daughter is better prepared to fight Voldemort than Harry is...without magic! Her need to cotton wool her children is precisely what led to the first three leaving the second they could, and the twins planning their escape.

Hey Dumbles...SLAPPO!

A wonderful and basically simple escape plan which also demonstrates their loyalty. The only two pote4ntial failures I can see are first; there are some kind of wards around the castle that will prevent Harry's escape. While in that awful pile of...typing, called HBP, they were able to fly to the castle from Hogsmeade, the headmaster was with him. It's not tactically sound idea to leave an opening for your enemy to exploit. Voldemort is arrogant, but he is also very intelligent. The second potential fail is the shape of the brooms themselves. the school brooms are utter crap. they might not even survive the trip away from the castle, leaving Harry exposed and defenseless.

Interesting...Another magical contract, of which nobody is told. Ring a bell?

~*~Sitting down at the end of the table and facing the front, he saw a gobsmacked look on Dumbledore. Anything that made the old man’s life hard or surprised him was a good thing in Harry’s book.~*~
Now, why do I find myself in complete agreement?


The testing went about as I expected, with the addition of Snape's Legillimency attack and Harry's overacting. Well done there. "D'ya want some eggs to go with that ham?"

Harry's statement makes a great deal of sense. Snape should never be anywhere near children of *any* age. The man is petty bigoted self centered and a royal bully. No school int eh muggle world...other than in some third world countries run by dictators, would keep him,on regardless his qualifications. As a potions master, he is just that...a master, but as a teacher, he is utter crap!

Due to space limitations, I will continue this from chapter four to six, in another review.

Alorkin

wow i always end up finding a story i really like on sunday in the evening, oh well atleast i found it:D

I enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for writing!

Fun story! You brought a unique spin to a familiar premise, which is always appreciated. Thanks for sharing it!

Loved it!

Very different. Very enjoyable.