Great story! Good luck with future stories!

well done x x

Aww... I feel bad for Jasper. He has such a hard time of things. It would be interesting to continue this story with how he feels in New Moon when he tries to attack her when she gets the papercut.

One mistake I found:

Alice’s eyes hazed over for a moment and then she smiled. “Yes… would you like to fabric some evidence with me?”

I think it should be fabricate... Other than that - WONDERFUL!

Bitter-sweet is right. Oh I wish that Jasper hadn't hurt her again. He tried to hard to protect her, but couldn't.

Awesome! You're an amazing writer!

Awesome job! :D

I just love your writing! And this one-shot is just plain amzing! Well done! I just cant get over how well you write! Its breath taking!

Love this. Good job!

i didnt know that ,but this was an amazing story from jaspers pov

could you do new moon?or will the christian wes... whatever trash it?

This is horrible. Just leave this up to your fans-I've reported three of his "stories" at this point, and I plan on reporting everything he's uploaded. It's a shame people like this exist.

Never fear-your devoted fans are here. xP We're gonna get this scum OUTTA HERE.

Don't be upset! All will work out, and we love you. :D

That was really was nice 2 read it from Jasper's point of view. very nice

Oh, poor poor Jazz. he must feel terrible. great work.

Aw ! I love Jasper/Alice storys even if this was more about saving Bella then their love (:

Great job !

I loved this story so much I'm going to eat it like your babies !

i liked jpov it was really emtiony & interesting !

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sorry I didn't help the editing.. :p seems you did alright on your own! I LOVE IT! But he does hurt her... so your ending doesnt make sense! ;-) hehe

Just kidding...

Sarah