Hm, you really need some pratice with writing... I can see that it's pretty much all dialogue - never a good sign - puts several canons out of character at least a bit (Good job with Yin though) oh, and miscolour on Yuck's eyes. Several times. They never glow red. And I'd say they're amber, not honey coloured. And stating the obvious? And you never once mentioned Kila's species, so I find myself rather confused.
I'd advise you do some work on this. If not, then I'm gonna get Felicity and Kiara to see to it. I need something for the PPC. If you do decide to work on it, tell me when you're done. If not, tell me that instead. I await your reply...

Daw poor Yuckie! D:

i thought it was hilarious when kila kept asking who someone she doesn't know was to yin and yang i also thought it was funny when kila kept calling yucky yang

Awesomeness!! I'm loving this story so far!
Please continue with the chapter.

YAY! GO TEAM YUCK AND KILA! XD