 Mengsk 2009-04-21 . chapter 1So, ironically, the only thing keeping Kim and Ron in existance (through these repeated days) is also the same device that is disintegrating them?
Interesting conundrum to overcome. Say, will Rufus be a Hawking level physicist by the end of this? Depending on how long this effect lasts.
You know you could write this as if it is a normal day for Kim and Ron, but every scene Rufus is doing weirder and weirder things. For him months, possibly years have passed between each scene. |
 Katsumara 2009-04-20 . chapter 1Hey JJ! Great chapter and good start. Oh boy.. Groundhog day incoming! Here's hoping Rufus can stop Kim and Ron from going on that mission or get something done quicker to save them in time. This looks like a great start, though dude. Can't wait for next chapter. |
 screaming phoenix 2009-04-20 . chapter 1It’s groundhog day KP style! |
 Slyrr 2009-04-20 . chapter 1Do I sense a 'Groundhog Day" crossover? :) /obviousness
A nice opening, hooks you in. At the end, it should have said 'Dementor THREW up is arms'. Looking forward to the next chapter... |
 MaceEcam 2009-04-20 . chapter 1Yes! Back to the main story at last! And now, I can deactivate the tiny explosive I had implanted in the back of your neck.
*Presses button on remote*
*BOOM!*
...Opps. Wrong button.
*Takes a blood sample and heads to the cloning machine before calling IT to come get the body. |
 CajunBear73 2009-04-20 . chapter 1Oh boy, talk about your summer reruns...
Loved that movie too.
But I've got to wonder if a key part of the day would have been Ron completing that question he was about to put to Kim...
CB73 |
 Shrike176 2009-04-20 . chapter 1I always enjoyed Groundhog Day; watching it still makes me laugh.
Gotta say I feel sorry for Rufus as the story starts out; Bill Murray was just stuck in a town he hated. He didn't have to watch his best friends die over and over. Strikes me as funny that if Kim and Ron do make it through this, Ron will have no idea he's had so much practice trying to pop the question to Kim.
I figured this would begin with a flashback to the first Mole Rat Day; but once again you prove you're the master of the inventive opening chapter. Hope you do work a flashback in somewhere though.
Also, I've seen a several more adult themed KP stories work Rufus in well, he reminds us that an important pet really is the same as family. Though I agree that he also fills the role of Ron's guy friend.
Great opening, keep up the good work! |
 Comet Moon 2009-04-20 . chapter 1Woah, shades of Billy>
Happy Molesion Day
Ja ne
Jim |
 kari-yugi 2009-04-20 . chapter 1Ahh poor Rufus having to relive the same day over and over again. |
 Eddy13 2009-04-20 . chapter 1I think I can see why you gave this story that certain title. So Rufus is going through a Bill Murray experience. That should be interesting. When your story started the way it did, I expected there would be a flashback or something. Now the question is can Rufus save his friends and free them all from the temporal loop they're trapped in? |