so much said in so few words...a perfect little story. excellent, excellent job.

Aw, poor Sev. He just wasn't lucky.

Short, sweet, and beautiful :) I love how much emotion you can convey in so few words. You made me understand both Sirius and Snape's POVs, and feel for them both. This is very well-written, and perfectly in character.

Terrific job, and keep writing!

Jesus. So true. Losing friends to love, or... the other thing. Wonderful.

Wow. So much character in so few words. True, painful, bitter, and right. Well done!

Little touches I liked: "JamesandSirius" next to "SevandLily." I knew just what that felt like.

And so many lyrical little turns of phrase: "learning the in-between of here and gone," "that is his lot, and it is an ache in the hinge of his jaw," and of course both Severus' decision and his last line are absolutely perfect.

Wow.

Oh, it's so poetic!! I love how the two characters are juxtaposed, and how compare them (I wouldn't have thought it could work, but it's very well done...)

Great! Your Severus is perfect. I loved the distinction between Sirius learning and Snape not learning.

Ooh, excellent. I loved this. I liked that Sirius was learning to share and Sev wasn't learning at all. I like that Sev wanted to see that fake love in her eyes, but thinks better of it. Amazing job!

I loved this line -- "He reads, determined, and does not learn." I love your writing. It's so poetic. I have a hard time motivating myself to read storied centered around minor characters, but it always feels worth it after reading yours.

This is really good. It really lends depth to both Sirius and Snape's characters.

I think I especially like the last paragraph: "...keeping his eyes on the black inked lines because her name chases him in the cream of the margins." That's pretty. :D

Lovely piece. My favorite line is "He knows her green too well and no paint could recreate that; knows things can never be as they were, and this work before him is nothing but desperation and lies."

At first I found it odd that Sirius and Severus would be combined in this way, but I now see the appropriateness based on them both losing something special on that same day. I appreciate you ability to convey so much background in so few words for both of these characters.

Thank you for sharing.

So sad... I feel sorrier for Sev and for Sirius, though :( The guilt must have killed him, for telling Voldemort about the prophecy.

Good story. Nicely written. Insightful.

This is very interesting!
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Beautiful as ever. I like the contrast between the two, that Sirius is willing to learn to share however hard he finds it, but Sev just has bitterness and loss to contend with.