...sorry, dude. Got to CH 7 and discovered this fic was anti-Ryouga. Like REALLY anti-Ryouga. It ticked me off badly.
So...I REALLY want to leave obscenities and insults in here but that just would make me a troll. As it is, you lost a reader.

Laters.


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Or rather, never again.

Great story.

Okay, this is neat and somewhat different. At least it's written in something that stays in one perspective even though the story emphasizes two sharing one...if that makes sense.

Keep it up.

hello just found your story and wanted to make a couple of suggestions to make it a bit of an easier read for fans. Not that you have to use them its just a thought. Instead of using the proper gender pronouns for there birth form all the time since we do not have images of them to see exept that which forms in are mind from what we read please use proper gender pronouns for there current form so hat we see the correct image for the scene. for example it took me a couple of minuets in the scene after they woke up from the neko-ken to figure out that they where in cursed form I had thought they where in birth-form. so by using proper pronouns i could have seen that right off the bat. Also can you make a difference to ranma and akanes mental speech so we can tell who is saying what make it more easy to follow the story.

Nice story...though the elder Tendo girls seem to be picking up the art again rather quickly...

Please continue.

huh...

nice a like how ranma real slip in the role as a teacher... update soon.

this is getting more entertaining every chapter seems that they curses become more accepted...

Overall, it looks good, but there is one area you might want to flesh out a bit.

In the last scene, there's a stretch of quotes one after the other... sometimes it's nice to have that rapid-fire quote system there, in that it reflects the speed of the conversation. Unfortunately, what can happen is that the audience can become confused as to who is saying what. You might want to put a few more "Akane/Ranma/Nabiki said" statements or some variation thereof in that last scene.

Wow. I'm impressed. I really like how you've been developing the characters. I look forward to the next chapter.

chapter 4-5 is very entertaining but mostly like the idea of the spar between nabiki and kasumi...

Awesome! I cant wait until the next chapter!

The sparring match between Kasumi and Nabiki was fun. It's an interesting idea to have them as beginning instructors, but you might want to emphasize that their skill levels are fairly high, compared to casual martial artists, even though they're years out of practice leaving them below other highly skilled martial artists. Otherwise it's not very believable that they could be good enough to teach even with a little extra training.

I also like the way that Kasumi and Nabiki are dealing with Akane's and Ranma's united minds.

Unfortunately I have to tell you, despite the fact that I'm generally a strong Akane supporter, I really don't like the Akane in your story. It's not just that she's hammering away on the pervert-pervert-pervert theme every chance she gets, despite the fact that she should be "hearing" precisely what Ranma is thinking. A much bigger problem, clearly evident at the beginning of this chapter, is that the additional skills you have gifted her with have turned Akane into a total **. I found myself actually hoping that Ukyo would slap her down.

I've been writing Ranma fanfiction for over 13 years now; I've written, read, and critiqued so much that I'd thought I'd seen everything.

The Kasumi-Nabiki spar was something I haven't seen before - and it was played beautifully. What made it work were the subtle touches - the rivalry, the differences in their fighting styles - that made it feel like the sisters were an actual family. This was a complete joy to read.

Bravo.

Love the story so far, and it is really picking up. I can't recall seeing this particular path taken before. It is interesting, entertaining, and has loads of possibilities!