 crimsonflamedhaze 2009-10-21 . chapter 1Nice story. Flynn's relationship with Schwann was never really elaborated since they both were in the knights, so it's nice to see this come up. Flynn's attitude here definitely fits him. To "climb up the ladder" definitely fits Flynn's goal, and there is actually a deeper reason on why he wants to pursue his sense of "justice" that is not specified in the game itself. Yuri is clearly being Yuri, reckless as always. His attitude about the upper class is definitely prominent ("only you uppity knight types have the chance to learn another language anyway," nice!). All in all, you have completely captured these two in character completely. Kudos to you for such imaginative thought and this piece of writing.
As a side note, Flynn does not have the "Photon" spell. He has the variation of it called "Luminous Scythe." But I know its not common knowledge since not everyone watches Vesperia streams and its about the same. But just in case if you are writing more of these stories, Flynn's spells are First Aid, Cure, Luminous Scythe, Mistral Soul (altered from Luminous Scythe), Holy Lance, and Divine Streak (Flynn's now famous laser beam; forms a rune in front of him and a laser; think of it as a single, golden, Dhaos Laser). |
 CrystallizedPen 2009-04-24 . chapter 1Oh, it is such a lovely friendship. I wish I had a friend like Yuri or Flynn, so I can mess with them all day. Thanks for the story, and it seemed that you understand the characters quite well. |