The torture was wierd, but other than that it was a nice story. :)

eek! that was good i liked it! good job!! lol hehe

Woah! That was pretty intense in parts. I could actually see that happening...

Loved the ending nice work x

Wow, i really liked this! I can actually picture this type of storyline happening. Maybe not the whole Morgan/Reid relationship (which is a shame b/c i am totally for their love) but the whole torture thing worked really well, and it does sound like it could actually be an episode. Good job!

awesome. I can't wait to read more of this!

Wow! Cant wait for more! x

OK this is turning out really well, hope they are reunited soon...the team better get looking for them...more please...the Celt

Uh-oh, looks like trouble for our favorite couple. I can't wait to find out what's going on! 8D

omg what happens next! awesome begining!

OOh...good start...the Celt

Hm, honestly, I felt like it was rushed. Your chapters can be longer, and you can ease into things a bit more. Simply rushing right into the thick of things makes your writing more awkward. It also leaves less room for detail, and detail makes a story. You have to present a visual for your audience instead of just assuming we know what you're trying to say. Also, try using a wider range of words, not just the simple ones we hear all the time. Not that you have a small vocabulary or anything, I just think that you should add in more interesting words, you know? Words that enhance your writing to make it come to life a bit more.

I think this story has real promise. Just be aware of your pacing and your word choice, and pay attention to detail. And by the way, this is NOT a flame. It is simply constructive criticism. I really think this story can be amazing. It sounds really interesting, and I can't wait to see what comes next!

Update soon?
-Lani