I really like this so far! Please keep going! Dally's my favorite character, and I love your idea of writing the book from his perspective.

Neat-but I kinda wish you had stuck more to the book.
Great job though!

Love this... Dally's awesome.

You rock!

I like the fact that it's "The Outsiders" from Dally's POV. It's good. Update Please!

Oh Jesus you need a beta.

-Your dialogue grammar is all wrong. When you have a dialogue tag (s/he said) you don't end what's being said in a period but a comma. This is because the sentence isn't over until after the dialogue tag. ("Hey," he said. or "Hey!" he said. or "What?" he asked.)

-"Now I better not here..."
That should be hear not here. Get to know your homonyms.

-The prison isn't connected to the police station. Have you ever seen a prison connected to a station? The police station just has holding cells.

-"Ya know, sort of like brothers, the greasers."
The Curtis gang aren't the only greasers in Tulsa. Everyone in that side of town is a greaser.

-"We all have forgotten his real name by now."
They know his name is Keith, they just don't call him that.

-"...to the Curtis’ house."
That should be Curtis's house. Curtis is not plural so you need to add an apostrophe s.

-"I figured the boys there."
You left out the word 'were' in between 'boys' and 'there'.

-It's Darrel not Darrell.

-The gang isn't always at the Curtis's house. They know Darry is poor and can't afford having them there all the time. They also have their own lives.

-Two-Bit isn't that obsessed with Mickey Mouse. It's only in the movie where he is wearing a Mickey Mouse shirt and watching the show.

-"Darry looked at me. “So, uh, what do you feel like doin’? It’s been kinda slow around here without you. We can all get back to normal now.”"
Their lives don't revolve around Dally. They can find fun things to do without him

-"...hight too."
That should be height. Use spellcheck. Majority of internet browsers, word documents and this site offers it. Not using it on your story is pure laziness on your part, seeing how you have plenty of access to it.

-"Sinse..."
That should be since.

-"They both work at the DX gas station together too."
Get rid of the words 'together' and 'too' in this sentence. They are redundant and not necessary. The word 'both' was enough for that sentence.

-"...by some socs when he was out by himself."
The 's' in Socs should be capitalized.

-"We him all cut up..."
You left out the were found between 'we' and 'him'.

-Everyone is out of character. You need a beta badly. Your grammar is horrendous. They will help you with your grammar and characterizing the canon characters.

Mo