 Prozehn 2004-11-06 . chapter 6I really, really, really, dislike cliffhangers. Try and get shoot(present tense) and shot(past tense) correct please. Sorry to say that but it was getting on my nerves. I like how you keep the characters in character(parden the pun) but please put in more parts with Heat, Caporeira, Strike, Hiro, and Kitty N(They are my favorites especally Heat and Strike). Please take no offense with my critizium. Great story keep writing.:-) |