Such a great rewrite!

This is adorable. I like how eager he is, not at all like the shy man in the episode. Also, very good writing. No errors, and no grammar mistakes that I could see. The English major approves.

HOT

I haven't quite got to this episode in the series yet. I literally started watching Doctor Who about a week ago. I'm almost through Season Two now and I'm in love with the 10th Doctor.

And I loved this story. Is a wonderful piece of fiction and you explained Rose and Ten's thoughts very well in this!

I loved this! It was so.. hot! Great writing and so in character as well! Is it wrong of me to wish that DW wasn't a tea-time show so that we could see scenes like this? x

Very good. It's very rare to see smut with plot. Very few authors get the balance right and this one is one of the better examples.

This was super, super hot. Very well done! I loved John's conflicting thoughts.

(Just a note though, stiffle should be stifle.)

oh, that was so hawt *lies incoherent on the floor* probably the hottest thing with John Smith I've ever read *melts and goes to reread*

I almost wish you would expand on this story but that might ruin this wonderful fic.

very well done!

It's was brilliant! And very hot!