AW! I bet Tom Morrow laughed his ass off when a) Gibbs and Jenny left his office; and b) again when he told his wife (and yes, he would have a wife, and she would IMO be a lot like Jackie Vance in how intelligent she would be. I am thinking either a businesswoman or a psychologist or a psychiatrist. And yes, he would have told her because he just couldn't not) about Jenny and Gibbs meeting.

haha, love it. Especially the ending. Not sure if I really think Jen was that brave right from the start, but in context of your story I can perfectly see it happen anyway.

oh, i love it, its safe to say.

this also could asily be one of my favorite meetings ever.

just sayin'. ]

Brilliant! Just brilliant.

Mx

Good.:)

i feel like im standing there wtaching it happen, which i love. its good, i mean really good. i love the way they are all so in character!

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Yes! Yes he was!

brilliant. absolutely brilliant. i could just see this happening.

That was great!

I love it!

So in character!

I love it!

Ops, i've already said that...

Duh, you don't need to ask me about the teaser, i NEED to know...

lol-p

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that was funny!it was really cool!Is tehre anymore or is it just that! Eitehr way its great!

Loved it! Very well written!

My FanFiction's working again (for about 22 hours now).

Did I ever mention you are an amazing writer? Well you are. Never let anyone tell you otherwise. I'm top of my Credit level English, and you write 20x better than I do.

I wish I could tell you which bit I liked best, but to do that I would have to paste the whole chapter.
I wish I had writer's block, the only subject I need it for is English, and I've done that (Thank that guy above, Maths tomorrow, I can easily ace Maths).

Really I'd rather you UDed TF before posting this teaser, but after TF, post, please post it.

I may have encountered a problem (a problem that I'm sure I can work to my advantage, somehow) in the WW pardoning of the turkey, there are far to many options on what happens to the second turkey (Philip). Because Simon and Gordon wouldn't send Philip back to be eaten. Gordon's vegan, and Simon's veggie. So what do they do? What do I do, I have about six seperate ideas, alongside the other 980 whizzing about that I've banned myself from writing in length.

classic. totally in character! you should write their first day in Paris...

This is great and as I can easily see the characters saying this stuff in my head, I think you've managed to capture them brilliantly. As for that bit at the end, I'm not sure what you should do, but I think you should go for the cliffhanger choice.