That's awesome! Tails and Sonic are good bros.-A.U. '05

Sorry for the late review. I can't get to my email fast enough for some things...D

For some reason I kept thinking of Sonic SatAM when I read this chapter...I'm such a spaz. "SHUT UP!" That voice is awesome.
So we're gonna copy Tails' ideas, hm? Dirty thief. Come up with yer own ideas, Robotnik! Savvy?

Great update! Yay!-Laz

Good view into Robotnik's thoughts. The discriptions are good too, I can picture everything so well. I can feel it all building up to something big...

Ever noticed you're apologising throughout the chapters?

Let's give you a short summary of the first two and concentrate on the last one.

Generally, I don't recommend beginning a story with words such as 'usual', 'ordinary', or 'boring'. It doesn't show any potential interest and requires the reader to discover it. A story should stun from line one, not shamble until the middle for something extraordinary to happen.“I sounded like a complete idiot! What was I thinking?” Disagreed with that one. If you had given some motivation for Sonic's low self-esteem, maybe I would have bought that. OOC.

Anti-climaxic blame games in chapter two were already mentioned. I testify that opinion.

You should be hit with a bowling pin for the lack of concentration you gave chapter three. Such an amount of interruptive scene switches is a bad show. I was pushed out of the action before I could really feel the story.
While that chapter title is amusing, I was rather displeased with the last scene. Tails' tech talk wasn't even realistic. When you impose hardcore language, you must give us a reason to read it. Takes effort to concentrate on Tails' sentences, you know. Compensate or drop dead. That's the only way to go!

Some variety in language and generally decent paragraphs make your work promising. Try to work out the bugs and exert effort into personal concentration for future chapters. You might not succeed at first, but experience is not something we can sleep on.

Have a nice, abuse-free day.

Short? Yes. Crappy? Hardly.
Good job dude! Finally I get to read some more of your work! I must say I have no complaints and nothing but praise.
The chapter was short, but it acted as a set up for what's to come with later chapters. The pacing was good, and it didn't feel rushed even though it was a bit on the abrupt side when it came to the over all word count.
Still, it's progress, and great progress at that. Robotnik was portrayed well, and all the little details were there. Awesome job my friend.

Keeping writing bro, this story has a ton of potential.-SilencedFox

more...MORE...MORE!

You've captured the characterization of Sonic, Tails and their symbiotic relationship to a tee, which is something a lot of people seem to be unable to do. Well done on that. Your dialogue flows nicely and the story is well written with good pacing between chapters; you have a structure for each chapter and it's clear to the reader that there is a bigger structure which will link the individual chapters nicely.

My only suggestions would be to avoid breaking the 4th wall as you did at the start of chapter 2, and maybe give the chapters a little more 'meat even though they are well structured, it wouldn't hurt to progress the story a little faster in places. It's also not clear as to exactly what Sonicverse you're writing for (it seems to posess elements of SatAM, Sonic X, and the games themselves), and I think as the story develops it will probably become necessary to give it a little more definition in this department.

From what I've read it would appear that you're going to explore the concept of Sonic losing his speed, and possibly his ability to walk. The last time I saw this done I think was at the hands of Robotnik and short-lived (it was an action-y kind of story), so I'm very interested to see how your story will develop. I think it's a theme which, if properly investigated in your writing, could lead to some very dark and emotional places depending on what Sonicverse you're writing in, and what you actually want to convey in your writing. I think you have the skill to take this story somewhere good, and I look forward to seeing it)

Owchie! My legs hurt when I read that...yikes...DX
Lemme guess now! Something big is gonna happen but Sonic can't do anything about it because he's too hurt...Did I get some of it? Probably not. It's too early to start thinking too hard. [knocks on head] I'm a spaz.

At first when I read "Chaos Control", I was like "OMG SHADOW! [fangirl squee But then I read it and was like "Oh...Sonic...right..." XD Hope you add Shaddy in soon! That'll make me a happy person!

Update soon; I'll be a-waitin'!-Laz

Hm...dizzy? Is it REALLY, or is it something else? [suspicious face
Hey, awesome story you have going here! You're definitely a great writer, dude! No joke. The only suggestion I have is to put a little more description of the environment here and there, and you'll be good to go!
On to the next chapter! [marches off-Laz

Very good bro! I liked what I read. It was exciting and everything was in check when it came to grammar. Sonic can use chaos control without the emeralds? Or maybe I'm missing something... lol. There are a few instances where a little bit more detail could have been put in. Like when Tails was propelled into the sky and you said he passed out from the thin oxygen, he must have climbed REALLY fast haha. On a really positive point you really show a strong bond between Sonic and Tails; it's very believable.
All in all though, it was written really well and I enjoyed it. I look forward to another chapter!-SilencedF0X

So far so good! Keep at it! Would totally like to see you continue this story. We got a good story on our hands here and the dialogue between the characters was well written and believable.

Nice.-SilencedFox

Nice start, I hope you continue it!