|Reviews for Don't Come Home|
| Ice7 6/8/09 . chapter 1
Yikes, angry Billy. Not happy like your other stories I've read but I still really like it. I wonder what Billy would think when Jake comes home and tells him that Alice is back and then later tells him that Bella took off to Italy after Edward. Bet he would love that.
| DobbyWobby 5/6/09 . chapter 1
oh... crying. so so sad, so sad. really really amazing, i love it, but it's so sad!
alice seeing werewolves... um. i'd never thought of it before. um... i'd've thought it'd be she couldn't see them ever, unless they grow another chromosone when they phase.
loved this story!
| Karly Black 5/3/09 . chapter 1
and btw i think Alice cant see Jake before he phases, because do you thin its just a cooncedince that Alice doesnt see Bella at all until Bella's alone without Jake on the cliff?
and I think Leah & Seth probably dont think its a coincidence that their father dies the day they phase
| Noble Korhedron 4/30/09 . chapter 1
OUCH! Poor Billy! Yeah, I can DEFINITELY see Billy's point... Poor guy just lost his childhood poker buddy, now suddenly BOTH his remaining kids could be lost to the 'curse of the werewolf' - L.O.L! Poor schmo! B for the story.
| charmed-ireland 4/29/09 . chapter 1
Great idea. I agree that until they phase that first time Alice would be able to see them. I never really thought about Jake's sisters phasing, but with Leah phasing it's clear it would not just effect her but anyone in the families. This is a really great take on how Billy handles all of the stress of knowing what his son is a part of and now worrying about his daughters. Can't wait to read more.
| siromygod 4/28/09 . chapter 1
Wow, angsty, but really insightful. And I'm happy to hear you working on your other chapters.
| Kari Twilight Mist 4/27/09 . chapter 1
Rachel ends up coming home anyway in the beginning of BD. Man that would have been a hard conversation on both parts. Are you going to continue? I would love to see Billy's reaction to Alice coming, Bella leaving, the Cullens coming back, and before and after Jake being the messenger in the epilouge. Even if it was just snapshots if they were like this I would love to see them. Please! *does puppy dog eyes and pouts lip*
| emmettsmyfave 4/27/09 . chapter 1
amazing one shot, at least i think it's a one shot, but i didn't think that billy would have told rachel and rebecca. as for your alice question, i think that no, she can't. that's why edward would always be so nervous when she went to la push. and for harry, i think that they might have realized that their phasing caused the heart attack, so they are kind of the cause of his death, which sucks if you ask me. anyway, can't wait for your next update!
| littlemissliketofight 4/27/09 . chapter 1
oh how sad!
| TeamVampire 4/27/09 . chapter 1
Man, you're such a fantastic author. I was just looking over your stories. You have so many reviews, and you deserve them.
But Rachel and Rebecca didn't know about the truth behind the legends. Rachel only finds out in BD when Paul imprints on her.
Hm. I think... Alice would be able to see them, but only until a certain point, where the possibility of their first phase is there. I mean, once Jake got old enough, he could have phased at any time, without meaning to. So Alice couldn't have seen that coming. But when he was too young to phase, she would have been able to see, since there wasn't such a major variable.
Yeah. Seth and Leah would know. Jeez, that would suck.
Great one shot. There aren't many Billy fics around. And I certainly hope you're working on First Impressions. I've been waiting forever.
| SomethingCuteandCreative 4/26/09 . chapter 1
like it? no love it! It was so different then your normal, very well done! I think that maybe the wolves are a bit like Nessie before they phase for the first time, Alice can only kinda see them, because they're only kind of human. I think that if Sam knows that the phases are what caused Harry's heart attack then so do Seth and Leah, but even if Sam didn't, they probably would have figured it out. I can't wait for an update on First Impressions!
| Melinda the Proud Bookworm 4/26/09 . chapter 1
Very well written. I would be interested in reading Billy's reaction to Jake coming home or finding out that Bella ran off to Italy with Alice to save Edward. Maybe making it a 2-shot?
| love bite 4/26/09 . chapter 1
I am totally crying! I didn't know that was the cause of Harry's heart attack. I think you captured Billy's voice very well.
| Britt01 4/26/09 . chapter 1
Great story! I'd never thought things through to this point, but it makes sense that Rachel would be one to phase. It never did make sense to me that phasing would be unisex, and that Leah was only one of the pack because she was somehow damaged.
Yeah, I think that Alice can see the pack before transformation, but not after the initial phasing. And I don't remember the specifics, but I have the impression from the books that Seth & Leah knew that they were the cause of Harry's heart attack, and that that was one more reason that Leah hated the Cullens so much.
| tanwellman 4/26/09 . chapter 1
WOW, amazing story-I love it!
Do I think Alice can see the quilutes before they phase? I don't know, but remember she can barely see Nessie-and she is vampire and human...and she shares the same chromozones (sp?) as Jake...so I wonder if the wolves' genetic makeup changes before they phase for the first time...
I would assume that their genetic makeup changes...I am sure that Billy Black has been to the hospital and had tests, and nothing "freeky" (to use Jake's word) has ever shown up in his blood..and I am sure that Jake went to the hospital as a child...so...I would assume that she COULD see them before the phase, but maybe not clearly, as whatever is lying dormant in them that is the potential to phase would cloud her somewhat.
That's my two cents!
Also, one other thought...in this story, Billy had told Rachel about the wolves...in Breaking Dawn, Jake assumes they dont' know, because he was preparing himself to "keep the secret" from Rachel when she comes home to visit, but then doesn't have to when Paul imprents on her. So, do you think that Jake just didn't know that Billy already told Rachel?
I wonder what Billy will think in just a few short months when Carlisle has to come to the reservation and break all of Jacob's bones that set incorrectly. Wow.
Yes, very angsty, but very well written. I really feel like I know Billy better, and in turn understand Jacob's hatred of the bloodsuckers. :)
Thanks for the story!