HAHA Ada is gonna do some serious ** wiping when she finds out angela's dating leon lol xD X_X!

Hey! I like the idea behind this fic and would like for you to continue!

My only complaint is the format (you DID warn me) but other then that it's not bad! ^_~

I have to agree with the previous reviewer. You obviously like this pairing (I do too! Angela is a much better character than Ashley, Ada or even Claire, though it appears to me Leon regards Ashley and Claire like sisters and Ada just...plays hard to get a little too well) but while long paragraphs work for novels and essays, on a website like this, it's really hard to follow. And the characters are far too OOC for more people's tastes. Some readers like OOC characters for a laugh, but the serious readers and writers tend to keep them in character.

Don't take this the wrong way, I'm so glad someone besides me likes this pairing, but I think you'd have more readers enjoying your work if you kept them in character and changed the format. Best of luck on your future stories ^^

Ha...ha ha...this story just has everybody...wildly out of character. Sorry to say. But yeah...your paragraphs are huge too. You might want to consider breaking all two of them down a smidge. Or don't. I really don't care. Seriously though, why is everybody so OOC? I can't tell if this is parody or what...