 kazuya8 2009-05-17 . chapter 1...Wow.
I really loved this. It was short and sweet and really well written. I rather wish that there had been quotation and apostrophe marks in this, though. Maybe it was the word program you were using. Anyway, great job on it! It was my first KHR fic, and I definitely like the way you write Gokudera/Tsuna. |
 breadsticks 2009-04-29 . chapter 1Wow, somehow it was at a bit more sedate pace from Tsuna's pov, but it fit him very well, what with being slightly shell-shocked by Gokudera's love for him. Still a bit hilarious, but moreso at the end with Reborn and the Dying Will scene. I loved Gokudera and Tsuna and the simple things in their relationship, here.
With that said, you had a bit of grammar and spelling errors. Just a little bit that bothered me. And I sort of wished you kept Reborn out of it and that Tsuna had proclaimed the "With my Dying Will, I will prove my love for you," as his own proclamation in response to Gokudera's. So that it would have been by his choice and not some bullet's. But I guess Tsuna needed a push, as always. Thanks for writing! |