i absolutely LOVE the pairing RxH!

its like my most fave one in GA...i hope it'll become true in the real manga though...

nice writing!

xoxo

:)
oh yes, the fangirls will... be... surprised all right...
-smirk-

SUGOI! Mukya! Hyuuga and his evil plans Mukya! Good story!

Aw...! So sweet! To think that Hotaru would actually allow Ruka to hold her hand in public! LOL! I loved the way you toned down Hotaru's cold behaviour. Love changes everything, eh?

The last line "The fan girls would be in for a nice surprise" was so cool!

Good job! I loved de fic!

great, but it was a bit passive. there wasn't enough spark loitering their touches, if you know what i mean. still, holding hands, cute little kisses and possessive holds around the waits, it adds a nice coating of sugar in this fine, simple delicacy. yep, that's how i see this fic, really sweet, simply kept, and the cuteness is well in-tact. though i must say, you can still do better.

great job

This is amazing; I've managed to find myself another RukaHotaru fic. Yay for me and the RukaHotaru pairing. You're right; they look really great together. And yes, there should be more stories about them. People rarely write about them, which is kind of frustrating sometimes.

Err, anyway. I find the first scene very charming. I like how Ruka and Hotaru spend time together and how there are so little words thrown around. They're one of the quietest characters there are, and I don't suppose they'll be expressive just because they get together. You do well in expressing their control over their emotions in this fic. Aside from this, I have to tell you that I had to stop myself from melting when Hotaru gave Ruka a peck on the cheek. Simple actions that contain so many emotions are pure classic. I love it.

I don't know if it's explained later in this one-shot (since I'm typing this while I'm reading), but I'd like to ask why Ruka and Hotaru should hide their relationship. I believe I can't find any sensible reason for this. After all, they've admitted their feelings to each other; why should it be a problem to tell everyone about it?

I like the scene with Mikan and Hotaru in it. I find it fitting that it's Mikan who first notices the changes in her friend and I also like how perceptive she is when it comes to Hotaru. It shows that even though this inventor always insults her, Mikan is still there for her friend. Hotaru, meanwhile, usually can't stand Mikan's naivete, but knows that it's only this brunette who can see past her tough veneer. The strong friendship between them is endearing the way you wrote it. (Although, the phrase 'sparkling eyes' kind of irritated me because it didn't seem to fit in. Maybe you can find another adjective for Mikan's eyes?)

Just a little thing I want to point out: You put commas where periods would have been better. For example, 'Ruka chuckled, “So, this is it then? I guess, it’s time…it has been two months.”' After the word 'chuckled', it shouldn't be a comma; it should be a period. You repeat this several times in the third scene, so I thought I'd tell you. I hope you can make edits, to make it easier to read.

I'm very amused by the reactions of Mikan and (especially) Natsume. An 'expression of total shock' must be a very new, uh, expression for *the* Black Cat. I'll definitely laugh out loud if I were in Ruka's place.

"You look stupid standing there." Haha. That's so Natsume.

Oh, so Natsume and Mikan never told Ruka and Hotaru about them either! It's some sort of payback, I see. Mikan's 'It's different with Natsume and me' hardly makes sense, but that's Mikan for me.

I think the ending could have been more fabulous, if you added more conflict of some sort. The idea of the fan girls knowing all about Ruka and Hotaru's relationship made me grin, though. A nice surprise, indeed. It's a secret no more. Nice title, by the way. It's simple and it fits the one-shot as a whole.

Aside from the occasional punctuation glitches, I think this is a great work. I personally like this better as a one-shot, although a second chapter that would show how the fan girls' reaction is going to be very amusing. But it's really up to you if you want to keep it as it is or tweak it a little and add another chapter or two.

I'll surely read if you post more RukaHotaru fics. :)

thought she will be pregnant... haha.. i'm become a perv...

it was nice. :)

-An Identified Nobody

hi.. my name's windlady and you can find me sniffing around different stories.

uhm.. sorry for butting in but i'm really interested with rukarus so i'm here to say that this story is really NICE! ^_^
you can leave it as a one-shot and leave us, readers, gawking at your work.. or you can be a bit kinder and turn this one-shot into a chaptered story, ne?! LOL.

thank you for this story! let's work our hardest ne?! ^_^

~windlady

(P.S. sorry for not logging in but ffnet is preventing me from doing that. i actually exist here so next time i'll be around again in some other stories. take care!)

nice..
please update soon..
^-^

WOw! Love it!
Is this a One-shot story? or not?
^,~ -thumbs up-